Crucify th Siren: Lost in the Abyss

The dancing dreams that rode the sea,
Meet the darkness following me.
Bedight in lily-white of hue,
Trapped without the rainbows' dew.

Oh Cupid! You mischievous lad,
Brought poison so bitter and sad.
For the one lost in the abyss,
Wander away with his sweet kiss.

Ah! But to dream away the night,
When the ravens are all in flight.
A wanderer would never find
A siren's love so true and kind.

Reviews

[mackieboy]

ah, beautiful!
just why does everything sound good with love even when we're talking about it's being lost?
loved it. :)
just a li'l question: aren't you feeling a little bit of pity for the siren?
yuo've had it crucified like, not just once.:)

[dan nacario]

well i pity her
but I will crucify her one more time. :)

[CHRIS ANDES]

a lot of fantasy
with words that really carried me away
=]

[Amila Jay]

A beautiful write :))

[Queen Empress]

Beautiful piece about love!! I enjoyed reading it very well :)

[The Scholar]

I liked this piece a lot. I could see both sorrow and hope in it.
Ah.. and how alluring love is!

Smooth rhythm and lovely imagery. The idea of darkness following someone is always interesting--I can see one looking over his shoulder when he feels it behind him. Nicely written.

And the last two lines are perfect.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Really nice, I enjoyed the words you used in this as well as the nice flow of rhyming. Enjoyed.

[Kuhr Gred]

It is about love. fantastic :)! all of your Crucify the Siren series.. really wonderful and amazing.. feels like i'm in the story! thanks for sharing :)
- Kuhr Gred

[MandaBear]

REALLY interesting and quite wonderful!