I am Everything your mother told you to avoid

This poem is based on an activity from one of my creative writing classes. We had to use the 'I am' statement to write a poem based around concrete images.

I am everything your mother told you to avoid

 

I am the icy mountain trail.

I am the summit of every

peak.

 

I am well-worn boots that

stomp tracks to your

fragile heart.

 

I am a half formed snow flake,

melting your skin with a sting.

 

I am a freshly found mirror of ice,

to entice

your reflection

before you fall for me

as I disappear

to let you founder,

alone.

 

I am a crisp cut icicle

prepared to shatter

my sharp exterior

should you

tempt me so.

 

I am your sun,

shrouded in gloom

that hides my intention

to blind you.

 

I am the flames in your fireplace, seductive but

hostile to your touch.

 

I am the burning scar across your wrist

reminding you of a rotten love.

 

I am the bottle of whisky

that chases demons God told you were

real.

 

I am the Bible that you don’t quite believe.

 

I am your ticket to hell.

 

We are sun-bleached sin.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Lisa Victoria]

This is a beautiful piece Hanna... I love the imagery and the way you broke down the lines to bring a more powerful meaning to each word...Love it:)

Lisa

[Hanna McGivern]

Thanks Lisa :-)

[Lisa Victoria]

You're welcome Hanna:)

[_mal]

I like this heaps too. Very fresh, and the way you break your lines as well as the wording is original and interesting. I like your imagery a lot

[Hanna McGivern]

Thanks :) I am glad you like the way the lines are broken, I usually agonize over how to break them to achieve the sound I want the most.

[Emily W]

I like this poem, it is very unique in the structure and concept and creates some strong images. My favourite verse is "I am a freshly found mirror of ice..". Interesting read, well done :)

[Hanna McGivern]

I am glad you liked this poem, thanks for your positive feedback Emily :)