Drowning

Drowning

 

how can I love you

when I don't love me

 

i'm drowning

lost out at sea

 

you just watch

while the waves consume me

 

hoping you'll help

you just watch me plead

 

you're never there

but I am when you need me

 

how did I get here

lost out at sea

 

how can I love you

when I don't love me

 

Reviews

[chicandsleek77]

Really good poem. It is amazing, great flow.

[Christoph]

I'm just a boat on the ocean.

[FlatLineBeauty]

Hannah, this was just simply amazing. Reading your work I just feel like I am taking a personal peek into your window of life and in your mind. xo Winter

[Sarah Lynn]

I really like the way you set this poem up ! & I like the message as well! Really good job (:

[The Seasonal Girl]

how can I love you
when I don't love me - these two powerful lines say it all. While I go through such emotional ride and so can relate well, the two lines just left me with a thought (that's going to linger in my mind) -
It's only when I don't love myself
I need you to love me
When I am helpless and drowning
hold me close, set my insecurities free

(random lines that came in my mind)

[hmarieee]

Oh, I really like those lines. It goes perfect with drowning. thank you.

[Kaylee Olson]

I know exactly how you feel. I can feel the emotion in this poem and I can't tell you I share this emotion. It's a struggle, but very good poem!:)

[hmarieee]

thank you.

[David Burke]

Very nice kido you did a really good job expressing your message here :)

[hmarieee]

thank you.

[David Burke]

you're welcome

[annabellee]

Great write. You're very talented, keep up the good work :)
Good flow and rhymes.

[hmarieee]

thank you.

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Neon]

you're never there
but I am when you need me ... cool lines.

I loved this pain of the love... i've felt the piece, what a strong heartfelt poem, the starting with great ending's cool, you dig it. Keep on dear, Hannah-Fannah.

[hmarieee]

thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

Good point and poem...Bravo..................

[hmarieee]

yes, thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)........................