Invariance of the Waves

Frayse gazed out over an inexhaustible sea.

Her dark blue eyes scanning the horizon.

To what end?

In hopes of spying a wave more engrossing than the last?

No new activity had transpired on that skyline for two years.

Thus her constant searching was enigmatic to me,

But not unbidden, for it gave me more time to be near her,

watch the freckles appear on her dainty nose and watch her delicate hands

brush loose strands of penny bleached blond from her eyes.

Those navy eyes that watched. 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Samuel Ferris]

I think invariance is a sweet word, but almost too technical for the title of this poem. I think its a concise poem, well worded, and too the point. Its experiential, rather than analytic. At least thats how i read it. I also think many people starting out are more focused on the idea that they are trying to express rather than the feel and use of language to enhance that idea. Every word in a poem when used by a master poet supports the idea, everything about there language from the length of sentences to where in the line they place there punctuation has some supportive meaning of its own. When you start to read poetry like that, you will see those elements seeping into your own poetry.