Tranquility

An evening walk on the beach

The sky is now a steel blue

As if someone has partially sucked the color out of the artist's palette and has only left a few grays and the lightest blush.

The sparse clouds are radiant

Crowned with rosy dabs of color

Ever so delicate and lovingly painted.

Tide pools creep into the bank of sand with confidence and purpose

Clear pools that mirror the majestic sky above.

Ripples occasionally distort the view

But the water looks up at the heavens and the heavens gaze back at the water

And they are one

Tied together by one gentle breath that runs across the salty waves

And tosses my hair back with carefree and delicate hands.

The ocean stretches out

Rhythmically

Bubbling foam against dark sand and abandoned seashells laying scattered and broken.

I walk next to them and can feel an eternity of time beneath me and surrounding me

Time that has been worn down and swept into one being

One outstretch of dotted sand

Salty brooding water

And a sky that holds the light of tomorrow within it's vast heavens.

Reviews

[Maja]

This is such a serene way of describing the earth. You can feel the peace emanating from the poem, like the only thing left to do after reading it is to close your eyes and find that peace within yourself. The words you used were highly effective in creating the imagery, and I especially liked the line:

"I walk next to them and can feel an eternity of time beneath me and surrounding me"

However, you have a typo: "... within [its] vast heavens".

That's all. :)

[hdean]

Thank you so much for the thoughtful review!! And thank you for pointing that out, I didn't even see it haha.

[Maja]

You're welcome :)

[Writeforlovely]

Gorgeous writing! Thank you for taking me to that special place. :)

Please keep writing!

[rickm97]

Beautiful! Quite lovely!
You painted quite the picture.
"Hiding behind the mask" and "Tranquility" took us from 'pain' to 'peaceful.'
Very nice work on both.

[hdean]

Thank you so much!!! :)

[dreamcatcher]

I really liked the structure of the poem...how the short lines are followed by longer ones like the ocean rhythm and the floating waves...it reminds me of the poem Sandpiper by Elizabeth Bishop for some reason:) Loved the poem!:')

[hdean]

Thank you for the comparison, I like that poem a lot. I appreciate the kind words! :)

[dreamcatcher]

You're welcome! All the best with writing, and everything else!:)

[hdean]

Same to you! :)

[dreamcatcher]

Thank you!:')

[Indra Neil]

vivid imagery in this wonderful write! evokes a sense tranquility in the reader! bravo!

[hdean]

Thank you so much for the thoughtful review!

[Indra Neil]

u r welcome!

[St.Quin]

A good description of a calm and soothing atmosphere. Less on the form, the lines easily created a picture in my head, making the order of each line seem fitting and well-organized.

[hdean]

Thanks for the feedback!