Asleep

One of those late night realisations

Lost in the world beneath my eyelids

As I dream of you

Hopelessly

Welcoming the dark that brings you to life

As you thrive in my shadows

Endlessly

For waking up means I would lose you

And a love that comforts me

Unconditionally

If I face the light, I’ll be alone

Left to accept my fate

Reluctantly

Just leave me here to sleep

Don’t pry open my eyes

Selfishly

Let me find a reality better than this

Let me have you in my mind

Foolishly.

Reviews

[Baban.A.A]

well I read works and usually angle it in my way. the poem was like an experoence we kinda all have or have had in our lives. I sometimes did not want anyone to wake me up as I had a dream about the one I very much cared about. I felt the sorrowful tone. here you have used a great imagery, which is sleep. in literature sleep is a way to run away from reality, in other words when you are asleep you are in a world which is not real or tangible, but when you want to be there it means you want to abscond the real life, and this can allude to death. the speaker wants to die but live in the dream which is great we have the same usage in D.H. Lowerences works. it was really good and I liked it.

[Hannah]

Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to give such a detailed review... It's very humbling... I'm very glad you liked it and were even able to link it to other work, I found that very flattering... Your interpretation is once again very interesting and a worthwhile read... Thank you :)

[Baban.A.A]

most welcome.....great works bewitch the reader to give reviews that assort it. thanks again

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I have felt this way before. I have found that the people I meet in my dreams (and many of them are reocurring) are often more to my liking than the people I meet in real life...as much as I hate to admitt it. Our dreams are created by our subconcious thoughts, and perhaps a few cosmic mysteries thrown in. I liked this one.

[Hannah]

Thank you very much Sarah, I can completely agree with you on that one! I'm so glad you liked it and I appreciate you taking the time to read it :)

[Antoñyo]

Loved it! The idea of "the one" being out there somewhere, if only in dreams, is how I read this for myself. A very familiar sense and feel, and beautiful painting within the hidden space we call our own.

Thanks so much, it's in my favorites now

[Hannah]

Thank you very much, your interpretation was quite close to what I initially intended,.. I'm glad you were able to relate to it; I feel very accomplished when people are able to find their own personal experiences within my writing, so thank you :)

[Antoñyo]

You're very welcome. I wrote a piece called "In Dreams" that was very much like it feelwise so my interpretation was broadened here. Thanks again!

[Chris]

Almost a prayer... soft and wistful.

[Hannah]

Thank you very much, glad you liked it :)

[SyberRose]

Nicely done...i enjoyed the form Hannah and your theme...enjoyed very much...Rose:)

[Hannah]

Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Lethu]

In the absence of someone close and dear to your heart you can almost grab their presence when you dream and when you wake up you are hit by a bombshell -_- I'm sure a lot of people can relate to this.

[Hannah]

Thank you very much... I completely agree with you, reality can hit like a bombshell sometimes... I'm glad you think people can relate to this, I think it's a feeling that we all experience from time to time...

[Lethu]

In the absence of someone close and dear to your heart you can almost grab their presence when you dream and when you wake up you are hit by a bombshell -_- I'm sure a lot of people can relate to this.