Who are you?

Who are you? Are you a person who is left behind?

Always in the shadows, a person who believes they're invisible?

Well it’s time to change

Change the time, place, and site

Time may not be able to go back and forth

But you can change who and where you are

Life is not so black and white as you think

Think of life, like a clear glass

It can break by a tap but it always can go back

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I really like this one. There is something about this one that gives off an awesome vibe. We all try to find ourselves in this messed up world. It is sometimes hard when everyone tries to change the past or keeps messing up the present. These people often ruin their futures too. Society is all starting to look all alike. Everyone is dressing and acting alike. There needs to be more originality. Don't you agree? I think so anyways. My favorite lines would have to be:

Life is not so black and white as you think

Think of life, like a clear glass

Those lines really made me stop and think for a brief moment. Thank you sharing such an amazing piece of art here.

[Jared Grace]

I don't quite understand the last two lines. You talked about life not being black or white. Is comparing it to a glass saying life is colorless or what you see it to be? "It can break by a tap but it can always go back" Please explain that to me as well. The poem speaks truth and I do agree with everything I do understand. Just not sure the metaphors are as spot on as usual. But then again I'm not a poet or an expert in poetry.

[Bluefire]

This is nice, I like the upbeat tone to your writing.
I wish I had read this yesterday, I possibly would have done some things differently.
Anywho, well done! ^^

[Andrea Mouser]

im usually invisible, but i am trying to be seen. finally.

[hanna]

thank you for the review

[hanna]

i'm sorry to hear that about you. I just want to say you may thing your invisible but your not

[Andrea Mouser]

thank you :)

[Eddie Davis]

Interesting poem, an encouragement to those who are 'always in the shadows'. I like the way your poems are focused on making the reader consider what you are writing about.

[hanna]

thank you for review and if you liked how i wrote this one go check out my other poems that i have wrote

[Ashes]

Good poem I think. My only critique is that it feels slightly attacking. That may just be because this is a very real struggle of mine, the being invisible, the being left behind.
Overall well written

[hanna]

thank you for the review and i'm sorry to hear that a make you feel that way

[George Gordy]

I like this one too. I don't really read poems like that since I'm more of a fiction person, but I can relate to this since I'm at a point in my life where I'm trying to change myself for the better. Good job!

[Sam]

Now this one, I like. However, I see more potential. I don't mean to be rude; you can ignore me, that's fine, it's not mine to alter, I'm not an editor. But I propose, that some words be omitted. For one, line 3: Well it’s time to change that. I think you could drop 'that.' So it matches the forwardness of the questions of your first two lines. The following line, Change the time,place,and site, I would make it say, Change the time, change the place. You don't necessarily need to use 'site.' Finally, Life is not so black and white as you think. I would drop 'as you think' simply to give it more flow.
Like I said, I don't mean to be cruel. I especially don't mean to butcher a work that isn't mine. But give it some, that's all I'm saying.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Sound advice that I can relate too. Lovely poem(:
-mickey

[Justin]

very positive, no one is invisible, everyone can be broken down!!! :) :)

[Aleeya R]

I like the overall message of this poem - be different, be original, change your situation if you are unhappy with it. It's very positive and encouraging. Just a quick grammar fix: in the second line, it should be they're not their - "a person who believes they're invisible."

You got some good stuff here, keep writing :D