A BITTERSWEET SYMPHONY

A BITTERSWEET SYMPHONY

A Poem by hanir




"A BITTERSWEET SYMPHONY" 
Broken strings, 
Missed notes, 
Everything seems out of tune. 
She continues to play the melancholic melody of the past. 
Her songs depict infinite sadness... 
Caused by the tragic death of her one true love. 
She's holding on to what she calls a bittersweet symphony. 
But I wish she'd let go soon. 
I wish...

© 2015 hanir


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Beautiful use of words. The strong description brought to life song, struggle and the bittersweet symphony of love. I could add a epic poem from your words here. You are a talented writer. I believe we need good words to make us write. I appreciate your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hanir

9 Years Ago

Thank you for always giving wonderful constructive reviews! Its of great help for me.
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.



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that's life................

Posted 9 Years Ago


only when you can quiet the mind can the heart heal...nice poem,I know the pain you speak of.

Posted 9 Years Ago


terry smith

9 Years Ago

...the weight that sucks the air out of your lungs and slows your blood...yes I know of that.
hanir

9 Years Ago

So how did you deal with it?
terry smith

9 Years Ago

just kept on living, eventually the things you love to do will give you some comfort, then you meet .. read more
Melancholic. Such sadness and longing. Had a piece I was going to write similar to this of a woman who lost her husband who was a pianist. She could still hear him play every night. Turned into something else and I titled it "Blood in the Key of a Jealous C". Took a different turn indeed. Love your piece though.

Posted 9 Years Ago


hanir

9 Years Ago

Oh..sounds interesting. Would love to read it!
I enjoyed the read, Well Done, Looking forward to reading more from you and I will, gladly 8-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


hanir

9 Years Ago

So glad to hear that! Thanks for taking time to read. I appreciate it.
First, the title is great as well as the last two lines which paints a picture of personal longing. This makes a very vivid write to me that pulls on.."broken strings"..my heartstrings. That is not a suggestion of change but what you made me feel.

I do have one suggestion:

melancholic melody--this tripped up the flow for me a little.

maybe..

inconsolable melody of the past

Hope this helps. I look forward to reading more!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hanir

9 Years Ago

Thank you for taking time to read and to give a constructive review on my piece. I used the word mel.. read more
PANDORA

9 Years Ago

I'm glad I could help and yes, i will read and review more. :-)
Beautiful use of words. The strong description brought to life song, struggle and the bittersweet symphony of love. I could add a epic poem from your words here. You are a talented writer. I believe we need good words to make us write. I appreciate your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hanir

9 Years Ago

Thank you for always giving wonderful constructive reviews! Its of great help for me.
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
Another poem about loss...A bittersweet symphony - love is like that, bitter and sweet at the same time. But a love lost to death is a true tragedy which you have managed to captured so perfectly with your words.


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JulianaSun

9 Years Ago

A dead soul is sometimes more painful to watch than a dead person, weird as it may sound.
hanir

9 Years Ago

Exactly! The pain seems eternal! 😭
Saruwa

9 Years Ago

Very deep. Thanks for sharing. Agreed ^^ A death of a relationship or someones soul is much more pai.. read more

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