unspoken words

A Story by hanah

She was sitting on the edge of the bed, legs crossed and her hands curled up in her lap. She was staring outside the window from which the last rays of the setting sun were visible. Her face was expressionless as if she were a ghost...,..He entered the small room with two mugs of coffee, she re arranged her features and managed a small smile as she took one of the cups. She looked around the small apartment it was a bit untidy but still it seemed very homely. And suddenly All those memories from the past flashed in front of her eyes blinding her from her present…….

they were both sitting on the couch looking at the photos of some recent wedding of a friend and laughing at the weird photos……

she was hitting him with cushions while he was working on his pc..…

lots of books were spread on the floor as they both tried to study hard preparing for their exams….

It all seemed so far now, so far… “Are you ok”? He asked her as he sat on the chair close to the bed. “You look so pale. Is everything alright”?

But he already knew that she was not ‘alright’... it had been 2 month since she came to him and told him about her engagement. She had a longing in her eyes as if waiting for him to say something but he just said with a fake smile “wow! So you are finally grown up. Congrats” and patted her on back as she had won a race. She looked disappointed and broken but he turned his back to her. He didn’t said those unspoken words which he wanted to shout... yes he wanted to shout out loud but something kept him rooted to the spot. “She deserves someone better” he thought, someone who can offer her happiness, someone who is not hopeless and job less like him. He had nothing his hands were empty…

“Yes I am fine” She replied looking up at him. She looked old beyond her age and her fake smile wasn’t reaching her eyes. She got up grabbing her handbag but he didn’t get up “so you are leaving?”

“Yes. You will come tomorrow?

“Off course I don’t want to miss my best friend’s wedding do I?” He replied standing up and smiling. She sniffed and then hugged him and so he hugged back praying she would understand, hoping she would hear all those unspoken words… then she moved away from him, although she was smiling but her eyes were shining with tears... then without a word she walked away from him out of the door, out of his shabby apartment, out of his life….

The sky outside was dark now as he walked towards the window and looked down at the road. He wanted to see her leave as he always did when she left. There she was crossing the road and then it all happened in a second, he shouted as he saw her getting hit by car. He ran like a mad man out of his apartment and down the stairs towards her... She had died at spot and as he held her limp and lifeless body into hug tears started falling from his eyes. And so he kept on crying and wishing he had said those unspoken words……

© 2013 hanah

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Rin

Absolutely stunning piece of work. There are a couple of somewhat awkward-y sounding places but other wise it is a perfectly executed story. The bittersweet taste and suddenly its all bitter, its beautiful. I think it could do with a couple more editing runs just to fully polish it off but it is amazing! The unspoken words... Its so sad.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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11 Years Ago

thank you for the appreciation.i will definitely try to improve my way of writing and keep in mind t.. read more

11 Years Ago

You are very welcome.

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Linda Marie Van Tassell

Oh, dear! This is heartrending. There are multiple grammatical errors throughout, which obviously need correcting. The story, however, is perfectly sorrowful. I swayed between the two, wishing they would open their hearts to one another and express what they were truly feeling inside. Then, you just pushed me right out of the hammock with that ending!