Life Phases...

when you make someone face something and then quote about it as if it has happened to you .. i'm amazed ..

There was a time when life was just life...

There were moments we wanted to stop forever...

There were days we cherish and long for....

Life was a pretty big bowl of roses to pick from...

Life was a basket of joy and emotions to choose from...

Every second that we spent, was a second so beautiful..

Every moment that passed along smiled along upon us...

Priorities remained little, everything was spontaneous ...

We lived life in a bliss of the spot thoughts...

But nothing remains forever in our hand...

Its like sand slipping continuously through...

We were alone , and will always be...

Rest is just an illusion, a method set by Him...

To remember and cherish all the good times ...

In the times when nothing goes good...

Until,

Life again becomes life...

Reviews

[Becca Bishop]

Very nice imagery and metaphor, especially in the "Life was a pretty big bowl of roses..." line. I liked it ;P Although, and sorry for criticizing, I feel like the "sand slipping away" metaphor is a little bit cliche. But to each his own. Overall, I really liked it :D Great job!!!

[Hamza]

oh yes you're right but it was flowing and i couldn't resist penning it down ...
thank you for your kind words though :)

[Abdur Raqeeb]

Liked the idea of the poem. The ending really is thought provoking and uplifting. I think you have described the phase of childhood very well.

[Hamza]

you gave it a new perspective .. childhood .. well that's nice too
thank you for that ... :)

[Tarry Franck]

This is great - captivating and did indeed love the end.

[Hamza]

thank you for the kind words.. :)

[Cwortknee]

I don't think I could say it any better than kublakhan27 did. The conclusion is my favorite part, it's executed very well. Thanks for sharing!

[Hamza]

thank you so much .. :)

[Lover Of Words]

This is just quite amazing

[Hamza]

thanks a lot .. :)

[Lover Of Words]

No problem :)

[kublakhan27]

I love the "life becoming life" idea, and the way the poem appears to be working towards a sad ending, but ends on an uplifting note instead...well-written and well-crafted :)

[Hamza]

you really go deep within the words .. depicts your greatness as a writer ...
i am so thankful for your words of appreciation .. :)

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome :D

[Adam Whitworth]

thanks hamza, nice one

[Hamza]

thank you so much Adam ...
i was worried how you would respond to this one ... finally a sigh of relief ..
please do keep advising ... :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

great poem .. awesome lines and the flow is just superb!!

[Hamza]

thank you very much Qasim

[Muhammad Qasim]

it is my pleasure to be able to compliment on such a beautifully penned poem Hamza : )

[beautiful dreamer]

how pretty. i love this poem :)

[Hamza]

thank you so much .. :)

[KarinaT]

wistful and thoughtful - you seem to know life well....

[Hamza]

well, i'd say i'm fathoming life ... http://www.fathom83.blogspot.in

thank you so much for your words ..
they mean a lot :)

[KarinaT]

At least you're trying - most people go through life on autopilot. We need more thoughtful people like yourself

[Hamza]

haha ... well i'd say that most people are the happy-go-lucky type ... they don't need to understand life anyway ... :)

[KarinaT]

perhaps it's best not to know - too much information and all that

[Hamza]

yes that's true as well ...
but little knowledge is a dangerous thing you see.. :)

[KarinaT]

isn't it just...

[WingsToFly]

Well expressed and nice thoughts.

[Hamza]

thanks a lot !!