Virtues of Being a Being..

this was written a year back when i had finally got a moment of solitude after losing out on some things i never thought i would ..

O human, you are a being...

Your existence, is so precious..

O human, you exist, you sustain..

Your deeds are miraculous..

O human, you are a being..

You feel, what you feel..

O human, you expect, you express...

Your emotions are special...

O human, you are a being..

You desire, what should not be..

O human, you crave, you fall..

Your desires reach up to the forbidden..

O human, you are a being..

You smile, when you get to it..

O human, you forget, the end..

You believe you have, yet you haven't reached..

O human, you are a being..

You cry, when it ends..

O human, you lament, you kneel..

You want it back, what never existed..

O human, you are a being..

You beg, to go back..

O human, you stop, you turn..

To see a wall, you yourself made...

O human, you are a being..

You turn again, you wait..

O human, you wait, for nothing..

For what was, was; what is, is...

O human, little do you know..

That you chose, you moved..

O human, you did, but don't agree..

Instead of a straight path, you chose a curvy one...

O human, you are a being...

Bound to commit mistakes..

O human, but you must know..

Mistakes are a way, to reach to the righteous..

O human, you are a being..

Learning forever, learning forever..

O human, with each little mistake..

You step forwards, towards perfection.

Reviews

[Jo March]

'O human, you are a being..
You desire, what should not be..
O human, you crave, you fall..
Your desires reach up to the forbidden..'
Brilliant poem, your words reflect everything we are and do. Written with immense craft, there is a very strong structure and repetition that I love. Amazing poem.

[Hamza]

thank you for your nice words ...
:)

[Willam Brunge]

you really seem to understand this life very well.
it is not that you must've faced them all yourself, but it appears to me that you're a very learned man and in such a young age.
you, my friend, are a very gifted person. keep up the good work.

[hogan]

But can one ever reach the state of perfection? Very impressed with the way you express your thoughts

[dunnia]

" you want it back what never existed " .....this is simply beautiful

[Hamza]

somehow you always pull out the crux ...
thank you so much :)

[dunnia]

haha my pleasure :)

[Hamza]

:)

[Zammy]

i just wonder how emotions could be special ?
if it's collective then may be you speak volumes and it's really worth something!!
keep writing

[Hamza]

even on general terms they're special .. but sometimes they mean a little more ... :)

[Becca Bishop]

I love how you build up your poem around the many characteristics of humans. It's funny that while we are all so different, we have so much in common with each other. "O human, you are a being.../bound to commit mistakes...." I love that line especially and this one: "O human, with each little mistake.../You step forwards, toward perfection" even more. Beautiful poem!!!

[Hamza]

yes it is funny that we all have so many things in common ..
thank you so much ...

[Muhammad Qasim]

the flow was just marvelous and a perfect description of human nature .. we are beings, so selfish trying to get everything in our pockets .. so greedy so stupid and we do not care for anything ..really good portrayal of that!

[Hamza]

thank you for understanding this ... :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

it was my pleasure : )

[Talal Hussain]

Great composition Hamza...you did a wonderful job in reaching my heart and touching my soul :-)

[Hamza]

thanks a lot ... :)

[Abdur Raqeeb]

You have portrayed human nature brilliantly. Creative Poem.

[Hamza]

thank you :)

[WingsToFly]

"Learning forever, learning forever..
O human, with each little mistake..
You step forwards, towards perfection."
Nice thoughts, nice writing.

[Hamza]

thank you so much ..

[Cwortknee]

A lovely message of what it is to be human! Overall well constructed, and an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing!

[Hamza]

thanks a lot !!
:)

[Cwortknee]

My pleasure.