The Word ... You ..

The Word ... You ..

A Poem by Hamza
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Sometimes, when i come across someone who meant a lot .. I freeze and think of the times that have flown .. Once Best Friends, now Complete Strangers ..

"
An open book..
yet a stranger ..
That’s what I am..
to the world around..

I thought I knew..
you more than everyone..
Yet I know nothing..
beyond the word you...

I shared I cared...
as I got what I gave..
But still I lose out...
on the word called you...

I wait as the sun fades..
to the moment it rises again..
Yet I find it impossible to..
wait for the word called you...

I write to write the felt..
with ink and paper but..
Just as I seat myself down ..
I stop at this word called.. you ..

© 2012 Hamza


Author's Note

Hamza
Came across this certain someone, who I believe I never did anything wrong to.. and I feel like I'm guilty about something ...
Sometimes these silences can break you more than words ..

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I really loved the last stanza of this, it seems to bring the piece to a beautiful end. It's quite a lovely piece, and very understandable. I hope you work things out with the someone this is written about. Don't take too much blame, especially not knowing what you did..wonderfully done, my friend. x

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hamza

12 Years Ago

things won't work out now ... i'm pretty sure
but blame .. i don't know, i will have to carry.. read more



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Sid
Great write and I agree silences can be harsh and truly "deafening" especially if you don't know what you did wrong. You shouldn't let guilt rule you though and maybe in the end it can all work out. I really like the last stanza, a great way to end the poem...great work!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hamza

12 Years Ago

oh well they can be deafening, very much true...
lets see what happens ... nobody's seen tomo.. read more
I met a "you" living away from my hometown, and essentially had to move back home to get away from that "you" You've captured the essence of that reality as well as can be captured...well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

Haha I don't think I'm blessed, but I can certainly relate to what you're saying :)
Hamza

12 Years Ago

everybody is blessed ... you never know :)
and yes you did relate it quite well ... i understo.. read more
kublakhan27

12 Years Ago

That's true :)
I love the emotion in this; it stands out very well. I loved the first and the third stanzas. However, I feel that the "..." are a bit overused. Just my opinion, though. It's all up to you. Writing is an exercise for one's own soul and each one decides what they do with it, in the end! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hamza

12 Years Ago

thank you for the review .. and yes, i used to use these dots in adages sometimes but now i use them.. read more
I really loved the last stanza of this, it seems to bring the piece to a beautiful end. It's quite a lovely piece, and very understandable. I hope you work things out with the someone this is written about. Don't take too much blame, especially not knowing what you did..wonderfully done, my friend. x

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hamza

12 Years Ago

things won't work out now ... i'm pretty sure
but blame .. i don't know, i will have to carry.. read more

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Hamza
Hamza

Jammu, Jammu & kashmir, India



About
Hamza .. that's me .. An Engineer by profession and a writer by Emotion ... I am 26... I am no different, I am not special .. I'm just a different face, and a few different fingerprints .. I am.. more..

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