Sweet Nightmares...

There are always those few nightmares that make us smile... Not because they were funny, but when we realize we're alive, we feel alive ..

Rasping voices from the slippery steep

converge behind your wary eyelids,             

this time blades sparkle it right.  

Robes swell from your own ghoul,

boundless, slow motion drives,

through that cloud of winged snakes,

the rough beast rises, arms up and wild.

High winds storm the night, each gust 

a knife wound, each pause 

turns you in your sleep.

Morning lands on both knees

bounces twice�" are you alive?

Reviews

[Willam Brunge]

the last stanza, a two liner, a master class and the art of a true visionary.
that is how i see it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Lovely little piece Hamza, again you convey good emotion and a picture in a short piece. I do like the final stanza.

[Hamza]

thank you very much .. :)

[kublakhan27]

A perfect summation of this particular state of mind...I know I'm certainly more happy than horrified when I've awoken from a nightmare...and I have recurring nightmares so I'm really used to it now haha

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

This is very good, and also gave me the chills. I hate nighmares but in the end I do smile in reliefe that i am still alive and that I was just dreaming.

[Hamza]

haha .. well that's the point :)
thank you for the words though !!

[Becca Bishop]

Very good!!! At first I was a little thrown off by the title. I just didn't know how you were going to make it work...but you did it :D Your words fixed the images into my mind as clearly as if I were seeing them instead of reading them. Good job!!!!

[Hamza]

Oh thank you ..
I feel flattered by those words ... :)
Thank you for the kind words ..

[Jo March]

there is some amazing imagery. the phrases what we would describe so simply, have been eloquently and intricately penned by you.
very nice

[Hamza]

Thank you
And yes I tried to use parts of phrases that are common and easy ... :)
Thank you again :)

[dunnia]

i love this poem .... and this is so true :)

[Hamza]

Thank you so much :)

[dunnia]

:)

[anxia]

The title has done the job!

[Hamza]

:)

[afra]

very deep and beautiful ...well done

[Hamza]

thank you .. i feel honored .. :)

[Kelsey]

Wonderful illustration of nightmares and how they may leave you feelings. Great job. :)

[Hamza]

thank you very much...
:)