Just this once

the burden resting on stimulated shoulders

When I close my eyes

I fall into a trance

Visions of aftermath

where days no longer drag

and nights give new meaning to turning in

 

When I open my eyes

I stumble with sobriety

the days comes rushing back

where time seems to ever lap

and resting remains unsteady

 

When I close my eyes

I see you there

willing, yet uncertain

open arms -

from a distance

a step forward - defining alarm

 

When I open my eyes

I see the way it can be

free from boundaries

merging souls - yearning for

the urgency to release -

a pristine alliance

 

When I close my eyes

I feel the massive weight of

what was - what could be -

what is - and what should be

the scars of yesterday, the dreariness of today

and the fear of tomorrow 

 

 

When I open my eyes

I'm extending a hand

proposing an ease

to the strife within

 

 

When I close my eyes -

 

I want to hear you say you believe

 

Reviews

[jaime]

I like to read pieces two and three times before commenting on them. This one was a joy each time. I like the free flowing structure and the overall feel. Reminds me of times when I close my eyes to rest and I am flooded with so many images and thoughts...then open my eyes and see another world to think about...our minds ever going. Great job!

[Nely Amorim]

It's a wonderful piece, flowed smoothly and very interesting read. thank you for sharing:)

[Lestat's daughter]

Beautiful! I love how you worded the entire poem. It's beautiful!

[The Spaniard]

I love this! Closing your eyes to let your imagination flow to what you want and what could be true but when that image fades the real world can crush those thoughts and dreams. Reality is a b***h and if we could find a way to alter it to our liking that would be ideal. I believe. Well done

[☮]

I loved this. I really took this in. This is the human mental struggle. We tend to vision many possibilities, but then let our own fears prevent them from happening. Our barriers do protect us, but can also be our enemies. You're very open with your writing. Thoroughly enjoyed.