Lupita

thoughts

Close the passage to this endless noise of uncertainty -

Defuse the energy and numb the mind

Secrets dance on a tongue of white lies -

faulty promises spread the virus to innocent aspirants

Will there ever be relief

or will this familiar cease existence in my name?

Reviews

[J.Black]

This is really good, wow.

[The Spaniard]

I cannot get enough of your work, while I'm a bit tired to soak evrything in a give you an analysis I will say its great like everything you write.

[Lestat's daughter]

I like it, another great poem!

[☮]

How true this is whom think outside the normal realm. It's short, but very advanced and ahead of its time.

This rings true:
"faulty promises spread the virus to innocent aspirants"

Was a pleasure to read. Looking forward to more. (And it most likely won't cease existance)

[dilettante1890]

I like the dickenson-esque dashes in this poem, short abrupt thoughts like flashes of light, always good. I do think you could rephrase the line "faulty promises spread the virus to innocent aspirants" make it simpler, it's a bit of a mouth full. Good work!

[Leran Vakem]

A good read this one, I enjoyed it.
Keep them coming
Leran Vakem