Lady Gee

I will forever love you

Meatballs and hospice

you just made sauce not even a week ago

"hello my baby"

 

those would be the second to last i ever hear

the ones i will forever hold dear,

for i do not wish to remember what was next

 

do you recall the coffee? best you ever had

last too

i held the cup to your lips, and saw the recognition in your eyes

"when did you get here?"

not soon enough

 

seven months prior, if i only known

 

repetitive squabble turned masacre

prey on the weak

 

to have you know if i had known the misery

in your heart,

i would have fought

for you

would always stand up

for you

 

it's hard for a Lion to lose her roar

 

i was there. why didn't you tell me?

why couldn't i see? why didn't i want to believe?  

ignorant 

 

and it's so hard to remain quiet now

for i know what you would want

history to repeat

sisters torn apart, 17 years of that wasn't enough?

 

i don't know if i can

 

my mind bleeds from distortion

my arms ache from the abiding tug

my heart pleads for strength

 

i reach out..

 

for your guidance

 

"goodbye my baby"

 

 

Reviews

[GlaxoCrux]

first off, sorry i haven't responded to your requests lately, here and on myspace, not that its a fair excuse but i've been really depressed lately. I started realizing that a lot of little things I enjoy, like fishing, I'll probably never do again, because of the motions involved and the tugging against the pull of the fish, even though not necessarily a 'heavy' pull for most people, combined with the motions involved probably strong enough to reinjure myself. I'll probably never run again, though I'm grateful to even walk. Anyway, that explains that, and I'm finally out of my self pity mode, so I hope you can forgive me for taking so long to respond. On to the poem...

The emotion here is amazing, and obviously with good reason. I think its the 'truest' poem of yours I've ever read. I think it is also one of the best, in a technical sense, that i've read... and I'm assuming its because the words and feelings came so naturally, albeit through a lousy event. I have a feeling the words just flowed from your pen when you wrote this. I get the feeling it was one of those rare events that writers only get a few times in their lifetime... when something comes so naturally that it needs little if any revision. The title pulls the reader in (DIdn't realize it was about your mom by the title alone, but it definietely peaked my interest). The opening lines are amazing, so simple, but intriguing, great image, and you can smell the sauce...lol, sounds funny, but exciting the senses is a great literary tool. Anyway, this is the sort of poem that is so important to the author that it little matters what anyone else thinks about it, but for what its worth it is darn good, and like I said, technically I think at the top of the list. As I've said before, I'm really sorry for your loss. I know thats cliche' especially from a writer, but what can really be said about these sort of things? At least you have let your feelings, or at least some of them, out, in a constructive way. Great job Steja!

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

you expressed your lost so well, when I read your poem I felt how you miss her, I hope time will make it better ... Thanks Yos

[Daniel]

Wow. That was powerful!
Really great read! =D

Keep up the good work! :D

[Dani California]

Oh no..

This hurt deep as I related a tad too close.
You have an exceptional ability to draw emotion from
your reader. I believe that even if this had not touched
me on a personal level, it would still hold the power
to pull heartache. Very touching.. sad.

Great writing!

[☮]

Wow. Hospice took me to bad memories of my past. I can relate, honestly.

Great piece. You're unafraid of expressing your real life situations through your writing.

Thanks for sharing with me. Looking forward to more and more.

[jaime]

(taking a moment to compose myself)

ok. WOW. my heart sank. lump in my throat. wonderful and sad. but very very real. i love the emotion in this. love, love it.

[The Spaniard]

that was amazing steja! The way it flowed and conveyed the sadness that was inflicted upon you while writing this was nothing short of stellar. You really put your emotions out there and believe me...anyone reading this could feel it. great job