Sensitive

Fun with yourself

saturated knickers; inflamed pulsation

 

decending appendage

 

quiet gasp

 

musky essence

 

agile progression; accelerated ticker

 

engulfed frenzy

 

collapsed stupor

Reviews

[Emily B]

it works. I can't say why. My day's usefulness is long since over. I enjoyed this.

[GlaxoCrux]

This poem is awesome Steja! The words are perfect. The only word that struck me as a little off at first was knickers b/c you're not british, but when I got to ticker, I saw the reason for it. And the rhyme works really well b/c it comes so late in the poem that it doesn't seem hackneyed, as is easy to seem when using rhymes. I think what helps drive this poems, believe it or not, is the visual aspect of it. The spacing of the words on the page works really well with the word themselves. I'm not sure I can explain why except to just say that visuallly I find it stimulating (sorta like porn?) Anyway, this, as opposed to the last one I read, seems like a completed poem. That being said, you can always change something if you look long enough (though not always necessarily for the better.) I think this one's all grown up though and can make it on her own. Good job!

[Leran Vakem]

Well to be honest, I'm at a lost for words on this
Words have escaped my mind on this
Leran Vakem

[nocturnalbeast]

I love this.
simple.
yet beautiful.

[☮]

Lol... love this one. Metaphor is a beatiful thing. As well as "saturated knickers."

Clever indeed!

[Dan Bullock]

Sensual, visual and very good. Through the whole moment, with your words, you can feel it.

[Michael Handel]

This is "cute" I want to say...I like this a lot...clever, unique. Good write!

[The Spaniard]

ha ha! I love this for obvious reasons. lol