A Meeting in the Park

personification of a poem

 

I once met a poem

While sitting in the park

He gently shook my hand

While sang a meadow lark

 

He said he had a title

A mere formality

He wore it like a smile

For strangers there to see

 

He spoke of life and love

In muted hyperbole

Touched deep places in my heart

As he shared his soul with me

 

In his cadence softly flowed

A metered liturgy

Verse by verse his words rang true

With vivid imagery

 

He spoke of nature, things unseen,

The cosmos and the moon

I listened so intently

Late in the afternoon

 

Then at last was time to part

But I knew we'd meet again

'Cause in this brief encounter

         I knew I'd met a friend

Author's Note

I encourage and appreciate kind cirtiques.

Reviews

[AndyJCash]

I'm intrigued and I like being intrigued for the most part :) It's a clever thought and you've presented it brilliantly. The only thing I'd say, whether it was intentional or not was your capitalisation of "His" which made me think the poem was God. Either way I really enjoyed this piece :)

[Mark]

A poem just meanders by and makes your acquaintance? That is a most intriguing image! Particularly your observation that, though the moment passes, the poem, once found, will never depart, so long as you have made the effort to "take his hand".
Two minute observations: would "muted hyperbole" be an oxymoron, or are you saying that the over-the-top-ness of a new verse idea must be kept under wraps, until you have deciphered its true self, and are able to give it right words? And, though your word choices in sts. 3, 4 and 5 are good ones, that they are all the same "b" sound is somewhat offputting, since all six stanzas are not the same. Don't know whether this is anything that COULD be addressed, even if you wanted to...

[Sukriti Suki]

I am eager to read more of your work....I am intrigued by the creativity here.

[J Todd Underhill]

Well about time I see my friend Dennis drop in to this wonderful realm I have found, welcome aboard and I hope you find many other AP friends in the mix here. You will excel here like you do at AP