Seance In The Sky

A poem of divine intervrention

There was a seance in the sky

That drought wrought month of July

Clouds gathered there, not for relief

But to tease and add more grief

 

Within the cloud, sat a table

Six spirits round, dark, unstable

This Hell bent crew, an unholy legion

Channeling evil to consume this region

 

Within the humbled town below

The last few faithful prayed in row

Seeking rain from Heaven's fountain

Sent from God of yonder mountain

 

The spirits heard and scorned with laughter

Town wouldn't get what it was after

A lone Angel hovering 'bove the cloud

Heard the prayers and mocking crowd

 

A tear formed in the Angel's eye

And dropped down from that barren sky

As it pierced the scorning cloud

The laughter stopped among the proud

 

That holy drop dissolved that hoard

And filled the cloud until it poured

The unholy seance once did reign

But now it seems, it was in vain

 

The faithful folk now offered thanks

For end of  evil's  sad, cruel pranks

And praised the holy God above

For His provision and His love

 

Author's Note

I am open to constructive criticism, thanks.

Reviews

[Marie]

This is very good. There are two corrections I would suggest: In the third line of the third verse "Heaven's" should be possessive. In the third line of the third verse from the end The word should be "pierced."
Ordinarily I would ot mention these ittle things, but you askef for constructive criticism.

[Dennis White]

You have a sharp eye Marie, I agree with your suggestions and plan to implement them. Thank you for these fine suggestions, it is appreciated.

[Woody]

a good poem that flows nicely. I much like the idea of the seance in the sky and enjoyed the humour in it. thanks for sharing.

[BThomvanWart]

Seance In The Sky was actually what caught my attention. The title was so interesting! So, I just had to click through and read this piece. I absolutely loved the flow of it. It ebbed and receded, but almost more like a puddle when rain drops splash into it; that undulating effect. To be honest, when I first read the title, my reaction was "A Native American piece? Is it? Let's see!" But, nevertheless, it was worth the read.