Dark Sins

       

Among the barbed woods of life

Her soul was seeking the light

Looking for a new day, a new delight

Fighting the demons of sins That nesting inside

Hunting her soul, confusing her mind

She was struggling to get a clue

A key to tell her what to do !

What is wrong ?, what is right?

Surrounded by a bubble of lies

Craving for the truth and  justice behind

She ran, she fought , and cried

She screamed …  she begged

But no one could hear her shout!

Her soul chained with silver lies and sins

Everything was getting dark , getting insane

There wasn't enough time to decide

No one came to risk her , no one dared to fight

They became slaves to the lord of dark

She didn't have much time

 She had to decide and make up her mind

The ravens were calling for her soul

She had to decide …

And she did!!!

Her soul's aura invaded the  wild dark

And defeated the evil that resides inside

Yes ! She chose to die with pride

over living chained in sins and lies ...

 

Reviews

[Yasmin]

A classic charming tale of the great battle between a free soul and darkness.
I like this a lot and I love how fast you are improving

"Her soul's aura invaded the wild dark
And defeated the evil that resides inside
Yes ! She chose to die with pride
over living chained in sins and lies ..."

Well done Hadeel
Keep up the good write

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Inshallah thank you dear :*

[PurpleQuartz]

Brilliant! Full of the darkness of lies and the light of truth.
Great write!

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thanks ^_^

[Annabelle Lee]

oh my. magnificent!

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

^_^ So glad you liked it .

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A dark piece of fantasy that ends in a triumph of good over evil.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thanks john ^_^ for your review , i appreciate it !

[BL]

To die fighting for your principles is a sacrifice few take, it is much easier to turn your back and run or hide. This opens up a lot of interesting questions.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

It is :) Thanks for your review :)

[Akshita]

To live with nothing or to die with pride....it's really good...loved it!!! :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

I'm glad you loved it !

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Your narrative is so amazinggggg...
suspense and intensity throughout....

Love it :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

I'm so glad you loved it :) i wrote it when i was in the lab :P hhhhhh

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Hehehe, nice stuff :P

[Frieda P]

I'm not sure if that's a happy ending or not Hadeel... ;-)

Seriously, my charming fairy, this is the best of yours by far that I've read. It's twisted and dark, has an element of fantasy and reality threaded within it. I do love this one! Brava, nicely pen'd.

'The ravens were calling for her soul'

Poor ravens are always getting a bad rap, but this line is fantastico!

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Wowwww!!! you made my night !!
hearing these words from you its such an honor Frieda !
I'm so glad you loved it that much ... And yes poor ravens :P

[Frieda P]

haha, yes poor ravens...great poetry though! My pleasure ;-)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

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[Jack...]

A classic tale of good vs evil, wth a twist. The twist being the writing is superb. It draws the reader in with sharp talons and does not release until the end confirms our beliefs. Very, very good.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

What a nice words you said , thank you so much jack i am honored by your words, thank you :)

[Jack...]

You are very welcome

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:)

[Crissie Luce]

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Hadeel you have to read what I just wrote "2013 Victory"!!! I wrote it before I read this!!! It describes what I just wrote!! If you have time, come by my page and read it!!! This is just Pure Awesomeness!! Wow........:-*

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

It is awesome !!! i will read it now :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy..]

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