Dark Sins

       

Among the barbed woods of life

Her soul was seeking the light

Looking for a new day, a new delight

Fighting the demons of sins That nesting inside

Hunting her soul, confusing her mind

She was struggling to get a clue

A key to tell her what to do !

What is wrong ?, what is right?

Surrounded by a bubble of lies

Craving for the truth and  justice behind

She ran, she fought , and cried

She screamed …  she begged

But no one could hear her shout!

Her soul chained with silver lies and sins

Everything was getting dark , getting insane

There wasn't enough time to decide

No one came to risk her , no one dared to fight

They became slaves to the lord of dark

She didn't have much time

 She had to decide and make up her mind

The ravens were calling for her soul

She had to decide …

And she did!!!

Her soul's aura invaded the  wild dark

And defeated the evil that resides inside

Yes ! She chose to die with pride

over living chained in sins and lies ...

 

Reviews

[Yasmin]

A classic charming tale of the great battle between a free soul and darkness.
I like this a lot and I love how fast you are improving

"Her soul's aura invaded the wild dark
And defeated the evil that resides inside
Yes ! She chose to die with pride
over living chained in sins and lies ..."

Well done Hadeel
Keep up the good write

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Inshallah thank you dear :*

[Deron Alexis]

"Among the barbed woods of life" After that I had to keep reading really i literally had no choice your style of writing lends itself for the use of complexed vocabulary and you're good at English so there you have it you're basically unstoppable in that regard it also lends itself to allot of emotion and you seem to be quite an emotional writer this was put together really well you expressed yourself at one point i could your restriction run away from you . You're awesome keep it up

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Ohhhhhhhhhh thank you for your sweet review i appreciate it so much :)

[Deron Alexis]

hey ...said what i meant XD

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

;)

[Acer]

Nicely written

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you :)

[Acer]

My pleasure :-'), but the writing & pic. all good as well.

[Acer]

My pleasure :-'), but the writing & pic. all good as well.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

^_^ thanks again

[Acer]

My pleasure again :-'')

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

So much like your arabic writings... But you're learning to turn them to english gradually
Really good

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you Adam ^_^
I just tried to write something dark , i didn't mean to turn anything to english .

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

I didnt mean that! I meant that your mind is adjusting to writing in english

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Yeah i see , but actually i started to hate it :/

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

I mean i hate the fact that i didn't write any thing in Arabic for a quite while :(
and i hate that !

[Lozzie]

I love this!!!! Its so dark yet you can see the bursts of light as she struggles to free herself :) WELL DONE!!!

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you ^_^

[Lozzie]

You're welcome :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:)

[MOON]

Deep dark write, the classic good over evil. Lovely flowing write.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you :)))))))))

[Chris]

Hi... how we live, how we view living, how we understand - everything ...is part of our heritage and culture AND part of what we are taught by family, friends, teachers, and Faith.

Your english is pretty rough - you know that already; but, the thoughts behind your eyes DO come through. You give a strong message of your belief - throughout the poem ...and I DO understand its ending.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:) Thanks

[Chris]

welcome

[Dalia]

This is amazing indeed
Really enjoyed it
Well done Hadeel, your write gets better and better :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Hhhhhhhhh :) do you think???
See ! even the lab inspired me :P nothing would stop me :P

[Dalia]

you are talented girl, you would write creatively even if you were doing the dishes xD
:*

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

hhhhhhhhhhhhhh dishes !!! :P
sweet dalia :*

[khalid]

we may live our lives sinking in seas of sins thinking we are cursed but we forget that we are human beings, we havent been created as angels, we are liable to sin because then we feel we need God forgiveness. our need for that is the secret and the reason of our life. we sin, God forgives, that is how we should believe. i have really enjoyed reading this nice poem with its meaningful message and at the same time it is enjoyable to read.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you so much i am so glad that you enjoyed it :)

[Ahmad Cox]

So powerful a message and a poem. This could truly be the story of many young girls these days. Thank you for writing such an awesome and empathetic write.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you Ahmad my pleasure ^_^