What lies behind

In the luster of your eyes

In the dark behind …

I can know , what you hide

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In the shivering lips

I can tell what the words

You are trying to hold

Beyond their talk

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Stop fighting what lies inside

Make it easy for yourself

Make it easy for my heart

 break the chains  Of rules and sanity

Say it all , I can hear , I can feel

Break your curbs  and free your feelings

Reviews

[khalid]

sometimes we hide what we really feel because we think we care for the other person's feelings. but in most of the times this other person wants to hear what we hide. that is what shyness means. i dont really like it because since there are real trrue feelings, they deserve to be told whatever the consecuences would be..

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Yeah , Thanks Khalid and welcome back ;)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Quite sentimental, hadeel!
You're growing rather good :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you Adam :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you for writing
And do pass by my profile from now to then, I dont bite

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Hhhhhhhhhhh I will i swear , i have many reading requests and sure you are on the top for me , but pardon me i don't feel well these days at all , give me sometime and i will review every thing you wrote here and in facebook :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Under the weather or depressed?

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Depressed :( So much !

[Crissie Luce]

Very emotional Hadeel, sometimes its hard to own up to what we really feel, but when we do, we feel so much better:-) Great Job;-)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Yes we do , Thank you very much :)

[Crissie Luce]

;-)

[Frieda P]

Sounds like forbidden love...so simple and complicated at the same time.

'Make it easy for my heart
break the chains Of rules and sanity'

Good one.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you ^_^ I'm glad you liked it

[Frieda P]

My pleasure for sure ;-)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

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[Shaylynn H.]

I made this review template so that I could easily and efficiently give feedback to other writer's, since there's so many pieces and so little time in the day (or so I'm told) here you go. Feel free to add me and ask for reviews!

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Additional Comments: it's not bad, the formatting makes it a tad bit irritating to read but that's something that can be easily changed.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thanks and welcome back ^_*

[s y e]

This is a beautiful, emotional write here. Well done!

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you ^_^

[s y e]

^.^

[MOON]

Emotional write own up to your feelings . Lovely !

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you ^_^ I'm glad you loved it