What lies behind

In the luster of your eyes

In the dark behind …

I can know , what you hide

**************

In the shivering lips

I can tell what the words

You are trying to hold

Beyond their talk

***************

Stop fighting what lies inside

Make it easy for yourself

Make it easy for my heart

 break the chains  Of rules and sanity

Say it all , I can hear , I can feel

Break your curbs  and free your feelings

Reviews

[khalid]

sometimes we hide what we really feel because we think we care for the other person's feelings. but in most of the times this other person wants to hear what we hide. that is what shyness means. i dont really like it because since there are real trrue feelings, they deserve to be told whatever the consecuences would be..

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Yeah , Thanks Khalid and welcome back ;)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The hidden sense we all must have, is a telling trait, what lays beneath ones thoughts and minds is the last frontier.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:) Thank you for your review i really appreciate it !

[Dalia]

very nice piece of writing
sensational and so touching
loved it :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

I know you do :*

[Annabelle Lee]

Amen to that.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:)

[Deron Alexis]

cool writing enjoyed reading it it made allot of sense your description was great thanx for sharing

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Welcome Deron , Glad you liked it :)

[Ahmad Cox]

I love the strong emotions and the strong metaphors of this poem.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you so much ^_^

[ms. barrie]

I very much enjoyed this poem, very insightful and enlightening. great use of flow and i love the whole concept of this poem. beautiful gem of a poem you have here. thanks for sharing :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Welcome :) and i am so happy you liked it , thanks for your sweet words , i appreciate it ..

[ms. barrie]

you're verily welcome, Hadeel, it was a pleasure to read :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

^_^

[ms. barrie]

:>)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A medolic plea set to sweet music.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Ohhhhhh God !! This is the best comment ever , so sweet of you , i am flattered ,Thank you ^_^

[Yasmin]

I can easily relate to your piece
I find it simply interesting and beautiful
It could use more work though like in the first stanza the last line perhaps instead of "I can know , what you hide" you can write "I sense what you hide" in the second stanza instead of " I can tell what the words
You are trying to hold" you could write "I can tell the words you are holding on to "
and instead of "break the chains Of rules and sanity" you can write " break the chains and rules of sanity"
I am sorry If I seem cruel but I really want you to improve as well
Write on ;)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thanks Yazz :) i think your suggestions are great :)

[Yasmin]

I really want to help you reach the top ;)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

I know dear :* , Thank you :)

[Renée]

Sparking whispers of unspoken love & want in the air... ( ;

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

^_^ I think so . Thank you sweet Renee