why......?!

 

Why….. she kept asking her self

Why I am a magnet for wrong persons !

Who steps in my life and leave

And their Ruins…. messes with my heart

With my mind…..

She kept asking herself , is there

Someone called Mr right ?

Or its illusion was created to revive hope

Or it’s a potion to heal wounds

Caused by their mess in our feelings

She felt lost and naive

She didn't know what's right, what's wrong?

She is trapped in the wrong zone

In a dark night with no moon

She went to the beach of pains

Starred at its teary waves

The winds surrounded her neck as a silk scarf

She cried and screamed out loud and

Took her heart and threw it

In the sea…

Deep , where no one may see

No one may catch , or hurt again…

Reviews

[khalid]

very nicely penned. very nice images although the topic is a sad one. i liked the simple words picked and the simple solution for heartbreaks..throwing the heart away..very simple..very imaginative.hearts are really the source of pain specially if those hearts love deeply. the deeper love is, the deeper pain felt.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thank you :D, yes so true ,the heart is the source of pain :(

[khalid]

welcome..my pleasure

[Phillitup]

A deep illusion to one and their many wandering questions.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you for your review ^__^

[Renée]

Hadeel... reading each lines is like watching tears run down.. right down into the sea... nicely done !

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thank you , i am glad you like it :)

[dunnia]

Very nice

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thank you ..

[revalatia]

love this one.. you can feel the emotion.. sorrow.. cold, lonely nothingness ... great work dude!

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thank you , but i am a girl :)

[revalatia]

i'm from california.. we're all "dudes" lol no offense :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

ok :)

[Jeff]

Very well written. Incredibly sad and powerful.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

oh thank you , i appreciate it :)

[Jeff]

You're welcome!

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:)

[PP]

So sad this piece it, I respect you for writing this one:)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thank you , its sad :( but what we can do life hurts so much

[PP]

so true:))

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

:)

[Shaylynn H.]

Not gonna lie I got really lost in the font and the flow at the beginning, it made it really hard for me to keep reading.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

can you explain more ?? what do you mean exactly ?

[Shaylynn H.]

I don't know, the way it's worded I guess? I just got so lost and it didn't really have a good balance to me.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

aha , i understand :) thanks any way for your review , i'll take it into consideration ...

[Deron Alexis]

very good imagery really impressive i'm guessing she threw it in the sea to keep it from those who would take it for granted

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

yes , so she can't get hurt ever again :)

[Deron Alexis]

rather extreme :) no one else will get a chance cause some one messed up on purpose

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

who knows maybe a miracle will happen :)

[rnuff]

In a dark night with no moon
She went to the beach of pains
starred at its teary waves
The winds surrounded her neck like a silk scarf

Love this part and on down, So much imagery in this,
so very tcouhing as well. I can feel the emotions tug.
Nicely written and expressed....

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thank you so much i appreciate it ^__^