in this year" 2013"

In this ''new year'' and for the very first time ,
I am not going to make a list of my wishes and
Hopes like I always do.

I am tired of these stacked lists which is the same every year
And nothing crossed above those lines , not a single wish!

I am tired of disappointment , desperation, and worry.

This year I'll make it different !

I will not make a list ,
I will not right anything on any paper,
I will just release my hopes, wishes and dreams out of my papers…

And, I will raise my hands up to the sky
And pray deeply in sincere heart….
I am going to close my eyes , letting the faith comes out of my soul
To surround me like a sparkling aura of hopes.

I'll blow my wishes away from my lips to flow into the silky sky
To embrace the stars ,
and glow with every wish that comes true…

I will give up my hopes to God ,
And I will spend the upcoming days ,
waiting for his mercy
For his surprise ……

And , I do believe and I certainly know
that he would never ever disappoint me
The way my lists did,,,,,

He will make me happy,
and maybe he would give me more than I ever thought!
Definitely he will satisfy me better,
Surprise me bigger,
And he will make me happy , once and for all…. ♥

Reviews

[Neha]

haha that's what I call true hope :) They teach us at schools and colleges to plan out, watch every step and bla bla. I have never understood this for it is better to kiss the uncertainties of the future rather than licking out lists that do not even come from deep inside our souls. Most of the men and women I have met fail to understand this. They wish for things that they do not really want. To accomplish them they build up plans which they do not follow. I have seen true happiness only in eyes of people who understand the philosophy of karma.
Keep it up!

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you Neha , where are you ?? we miss you :)

[Yasmin]

Your writing has put a smile on my face
I loved this part the most:
"I'll blow my wishes away from my lips to flow into the silky sky
To embrace the stars ,
and glow with every wish that comes true…

I will give up my hopes to God ,
And I will spend the upcoming days ,
waiting for his mercy
For his surprise ……"
waiting for more

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

^_^ i am glad you liked it :)

[Shaylynn H.]

Your improper use of periods, ellipses, and spacing has me far too caught up in it to actually review the poem. I guess I think it matters too much? I don't know. Sure we can go all day on how a poem has evoked some sort of "life changing" reaction to a person who read it on the internet - that's not the issue I'm talking about here.

If you ever have the goal to work in the writing industry or want to be taken seriously, you're going to have to try harder. It's like a painter who uses his tools properly, or a teacher who had to memorize facts. You can have all the creativity in the world but language is your tool and in order to fully grasp what writers do you first need to learn how to practice that art.

Sure there's exceptions - artistic licence, and moving a few things around to get a response out of people. There is room for that but for most cases you need to follow the rules.

Call me names or a grammar/spelling nazi if you wish but my goal is to provide you with an honest answer - and honestly, no publisher will look twice in this day and age at a piece that doesn't even have proper skill. Even an editor will look at this and say "where do I begin?"

For the ellipsis - which in this case I'm referring to the "..." used to show a breach or pause in thought you have too many dots, there should only be 3.

Also for the title everything should be capitalized.

I believe that since we're in an industry that has almost no rules for way of direction we should at least follow the few we do have.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

yes you are absolutely right , but i am not planing to have a career in writing , or editing in English ! i already write in my mother language "Arabic" , and i am very good at it , and i am planing to publish poems and novel in Arabic , if i could. but here i am just trying to express my feelings , my thoughts in English as possible as i can , and its not comparable with my Arabic writings not even close !
so when you read my writings , look for the creativity in the idea of any of it , and ignore grammatical issues , because i am not perfect in English , and i am not planning to publish any thing in English too , i am just amateur here. and thanks ..

[M]

this is just amazing ..full of faith and hope from pure soul and heart ...i liked this so much ..well done ...

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

ohh thank you so much ^_^

[khalid]

although the poem reflects big deal of disappointment, depression and frustration, you have written it in a very nice way making it as a masterpiece. i dont think we need to make lists of our wishes, our wishes are already living inside of us. we can just pray that we stay healthy and away from life dangers, safe i mean. whatever wishes come to real, we can be happier, if none, we have nothing to lose..
very nice poem...

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

yes i can't deny i had so many disappointments in my life , and false hopes
this is why i am not planning any more , i will just wait and see what would happen , and i wish it would be a beautiful thing :)
thank you for your nice comment .

[khalid]

my pleasure. i hope your wishes see the light of the sun

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

inshallah ^_^ thanks

[khalid]

inshallah?im muslim anyway..

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

good me too :)

[khalid]

since so, there is nothing in islam talking about god's readiness. Allah is much more superior to be compared to creatures' deeds including readiness..

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

what?!! i didn't compare him with any thing ?!
i just meant that i will not expect any thing , i will just pray and wait , i will rely 100% on him as every one should do , come on !

[khalid]

im so sorry, i was replying to someone else but it was wrongly sent to you..

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

its ok , u made me confused .

[khalid]

sorry for that

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

its ok really , have a nice day

[khalid]

thank you, you too

[MrKnowAll]

An on-going spiritual transformation. From being depended on yourself, you seek guidance in the hand of the all mighty. Something that many of us do in times of depression.
On a different note, I can really relate to the new year's resolutions getting stacked.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thank you for your comment , yes we usually seek guidance of god in the bad times and when every thing is closed in our way , but although we need to also remember him in the better time too , and thank him for it ..
its just hard when you are an ambitious person , knowing what every step of your life should be , but nothing happens ... i will just wait , and i know that something good will happen eventually :)