I've Imagined

I've imagined your face a thousand time

liquid brown eyes, dark almond skin

eyelashes thick and always curled

eyebrows in desperate need of grooming.

 

I've imagined how you lived

going about day to day

with a basket on your head

bringing bread and mangoes home to eat.

 

I've imagined what happened to you at so young an age

you met a man and fell in love

he promised you the world and that he'd never leave you

but disappeared when he found out his b*****d was in your belly.

 

I've imagined what you did to cure this crisis

sat around for hours just to think of what to do

because your parents disowned you

and now have left you and me to rot in the streets.

 

I've imagined how hard it must have been

to leave your firstborn in the arms of

a Stranger

trusting they'd keep her safe.

 

I've imagined how our life could have been

I'd be married by now, you'd be a grandmother

I'd visit you everyday

and pray that you are well.

 

But most of all

 

I like to imagine I have your eyes.

 

 

Reviews

[O!]

Goodness!!!!!! This is so beautiful and so very touching.......I am silent after reading this......so sad and so very beautiful in its sadness.......

going to my faves......

btw.....there are many typos....i can tell you typed this in real speed!!!.....pls correct them coz this is too beautiful..

THank you.

O! :-)

[Z. Smith]

Oh wow...very raw. Beautiful.

[Imperfection]

Very emotional.

I like how you begin the poem - the physical description of the mother and then slowly and very subtly how you move to the past, describing the hard life she has left behind and again ending with -
But most of all
I like to imagine I have your eyes.

Without realizing it, the reader has travelled back and forth in time.
Fantastic.

[Candle in the wind]

It has the hush of unshed tears and swallowed pain.It is beautiful I loved the way the apparent details revealed the core of the inner struggle and anguish.The bleak anxiety and desolation came through very strong.

[Marie]

Nicely done.

[Emily B]

Such an introspective piece. Full of your heart.

[Aaron J. Wald]

I think this is very touching, and sweet. But please don't take offence... I think to really hit your audience you need to show them what your mother encountered on the streets... what types of horrors, what types of pains. I feel your pain, I know how it is... but not all readers identify, some turn a blind eye from lack of experience. Again, please take this as friendly critic... for I am just looking to help.

[Bradley Shawn Mcquigg]

Thats a good poem of emotion there! I also agree it is kinda like a journal written in first person descriptive. good job!

[J. Hampton]

Very powerful write........
Has almost a journal -like quality to it...
Unusual perspective to be able to see the birth parents difficulty ...I might assume you ARE writing this from your own life ?? as you called this a cathartic write.

Would be an effective spoken word piece...

Really well done

Blessssssssssssssssss

[Chris Bighorse]

This is a powerful poem. The images are solid and the word choice is prime. Most of all it's the voice that got me; so sad, and lonely. There's really nothing that I can say that will help make this a better poem than it already is so I just won't say anything except exceptional work. The last two lines really bring everything in this poem together. Great work.