Another Poem About the Heart: Stolen

When the glass shatters, and

You are left with the broken shards and

Outside the world keeps spinning

On its axis

And no one heard the glass scream, you’re left with an

Effrontery unnoticed by the rest of the world

But it cut you so damn deep

You’re lost.  The last broken piece

Sits on an oak table

That someone lost a finger making

At a time when you couldn’t get

Another one.  No crap about how to

Seize the day, they go on, one

By one.

Can anyone notice, can anyone care?

Are you the only one cut so deep that

You bleed salty tears?

To those of you

Intricately designed

You’re open and easily

Able to be broken

But take this warning:

Leaving won’t solve anything much. 

 

Reviews

[Being.john.sweet~The Ev..]

i love the visual of the oak table, and the lost fingers...the leaving, you are so right! thank you for sharing this~john

[Casey Mckenzie]

Ahhh, I remember this assignment!!
I also remember mine sucking...

I think you used the beginning words quite effectively.
It all flows well.

[Dice Rosenthal]

Nice, i really like the meaning behind this poem, and the way it flows is good too = )

"Can anyone notice, can anyone care?
Are you the only one cut so deep that
You bleed salty tears? "

My favorite lines = D

[Coltron]

This is really well done.

I think you use line breaks effectively.

I like the assonance with "effrontery unnoticed," and "You're open and easily / Able to be broken" flows so smoothly.