WE AS REAL!!!

WE BURN,

TO EARN,

COZ IT'S REALITY SO FAR.

WE GIVE,

TO RECEIVE,

AS IT'S MENTALITY OF OUR.

WE MAKE,

FOR OUR SAKE,

CONCERNED TO MATURITY AS FAR.

BUT.....WE LIVE,

FOR ALL,

IT'S THE INBUILT HUMANITY OF OUR....!

Author's Note

Doesn't matter what we do in our life,,,,,is it good or bad but the only thing prove us to be a human is the inbuilt humanity which make us to fall and feel for others....

Reviews

[Greg Agee]

DIdn't follow this one real well. Got your point across, just seemed unclear, Real talent here. Maybe the language difference is throwing me .I do like your work look forward to seeing more

[gunjan]

Thanks...and ya may be the language is different for you but I don't think it could be the barrier between the emotion we draw...

[gunjan]

I appreciate your kind words.....
Thank you.

[Greg Agee]

Your writing is beautiful and Igave you the highest mark. Sometimes, its just plain me ! I do get the message much clearer as I have thought upon it. Thanks

[barleygirl]

I like that your short poem delivers a big message. I have to admit, I might not have gotten the full effect of your message, simply by reading your poem. The author's note was necessary for me to be sure I was getting the full message. When that happens, I wonder if there's anything that could be done to include any of the info in your note, as part of the poem. I think your final point is important & powerful. It would be good to dwell on it for a moment or two more, in the poem.

[gunjan]

Thank you for your precious review....