the Bees

a simile that i have drawn .. no offense meant to anyone !

girls are like bees
they'll hover around your head
making you feel good
slowly they'll settle there
and make a hive !
You'll feel like the king of the world
just put your hands up
and sweet honey at your disposal !
no one will be happier than you.



but then some day some how
you'll realize that the hive has broken
and the bees will run after you
make your life a hell
sting you again and again
and leave u groaning in pain ...

Author's Note

take it on a light note :)

Reviews

[RJM]

:)))) :)))) Hilarious! A cut above the the rest of poems this February season that are all depressing and about love or unrequited love. Also nice imagery and the use of the bee metaphor, now I would want to see a girl make a reply to this or something about men.

[Coyote Poetry]

Woman who sting like bees. I need to keep my distance from. A very interesting tale in your poem. I believe men are worst. Like bears who are never content. A excellent poem. You made me smile this evening.'
Coyote

[Liza]

i didn't know bees made anyone feel good - fun analogy - woman and mother earth are very closely tied to together - sunshine and clouds come from the same sky lol

[JENY]

no that is not true…
I will not agree with you….
Honey….

[R.S. Wilder]

lolol!!!!! I like this. Different, especially for you, but it's nice.

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the humor and the contrast between the stanzas. I guess you could say that woman are like bees.

[sweta'karman']

rofl....really..something I was not aware of..but yes it is full of deadly stings..and very simply you have tried to bite on...............

[An owl on the moon]

Read your author's note and the note from Poetic Justice as well! Rather a funny write that certainly has a lot of emotion behind it.. I must say, this one is full of sting!

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a different style for you !!

If we are bees then you guys are wasps..completely useless..incredibly annoying ..and doesn't get the hint when you shoo them away :)

[Arabdha]

well i don't know what to say to this one..its well expressed..but i highly disagree..