Amour's shade

random thoughts of my lady coupled with this amazing picture inspired me to pen this down...

 

thine presence sanctifies the atmosphere, creating a halo

'tis the reason why thy soul I'll always follow

and though after ages thine physical beauty shall fade

I'll be there to hold thou in my arms shade…

Reviews

[dovetailer]

I like your sentiments very much...
I am distracted by your mix and matching of modern day and Old English pronouns...I think you should be true to one or the other...
just as you are being true to the love of your life...
if ypu're saying "thy" soul...you probably should say "thy" physical beauty...

[Lydia Blackwell]

Oh- I really enjoyed this! So simple but eloquent.
"sanctifies the atmosphere"
that is very good. it has deep meaning. it goes beyond ordinary love- it transcends time and reason. Good job!

[sarah]

I like the picture!

[profile deleted]

aww thiat is so nice.. A genuine love.. How awesome is that.. great write there my friend

[Poetic Beauty]

This is only four lines long but feels as if it is pages long. the last line shows true love. true love does care about outer beauty for that shall fade with everyone in time but it is the beauty and the sparkle on the inside that matters most. Great perspective and insight

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

stunning gentle curve in care and keeping of the heart~

[RJM]

Sublime, magnificent! So short and yet so beautiful, the cadence of the poem is great every word used to fit your work.

[Inkcognito]

Breathtakingly beautiful, simply sublime ...YES!

[Bubo]

What a romantic, giving piece, that beauty is forever because it is carried inside.......the last two lines were precious.

[.]

sign...it's this the quintessential ideal of having a soul mate, life partner, spouse..beautiful