Morning rhyme

i had heard the first stanza somewhere and that's what inspired me to pen this down..

On the count of one
open your eyes gently to Mr. Sun !

On the count of two
awaken to view the diffused sky blue.

On the count of three
get up to sip the steaming bed tea.

On the count of four
savor the buoyancy of happiness galore.

On the count of five
rouse to shake a leg and jive.

On the count of six
bid adieu to the slumber that's keeping you transfixed.

On the count of seven
come alive to the divine music from Heaven.

Author's Note

i stopped 'on the count of seven' cause it seemed to be perfectly in sync with the seven days of the week :)

Reviews

[Cynthia]

You are right!
Stopping on the numble 7 will be what a choose if I write this too! I think this will make the poem more realistic, understand what I mean?
The Photo you choose is so beautiful!
The last line of your poem, 'come alive to the divine music from Heaven.' is one of my favourite in this poem!
Great Job!

[KatiePie]

This was very enjoyable to read, I really like the rhythm of it, it's simple but it's gorgeous in its simplicity. Thank you for sharing. :)
-Cathrine

[Liza]

this was a sweet read
flowed smoothly

[deeps]

emotion filled write and so touching. I enjoyed this.

[Bubo]

Exceptional and so so uplifting.......a new day and hope, love the idea of waking to this each morning and hearing divine music!Loved your work.

[Angel Bird]

If someone would recite these lines to me or if my alarm clock would sing this to me I believe it would be easier to get out of bed.
Nice and special.

[Dinesh Sairam]

A cut-throat nursery rhyme. But it's kind of jolly too. Keep writing.