just once

only if i could relive those moments once more .. just once

just once
i want to buy you a 'kolhapuri chappal'
made from the finest leather that's quite supple.

just once
i long to sleep in your cozy lap
enriching my inner being with a short nap.

just once
i yearn for you to trust me
as i whole heartedly comply with your decree.

just once
i pine to be led by you in the busy street
making our way through the fast moving fleet.

just once
i wish for you to consider me as your own
letting me enter thy pristine love zone.

just once
i bid to listen to your sweet song
taking my beats on a mystical journey, as in my heart they throng.

just once
i need an assurance that no matter what
You will always consider me as your part, even if someday I depart.

just once
i beseech thou to allow my soul to wait
cause for a moment of true love, it's never too late.

just once ..

Author's Note

"kolhapuri chappal" is a special handcrafted sandal famous in India .

Reviews

[dovetailer]

this poem seems to tie in with you feature poem...she must be some woman...
a theme we see often...repentent man trying to win back his lady...
we take these gals for granted sometimes...make some bonehead plays and then realize that we had it pretty good after all...this poem sounds like you've counted the cost and have a plan to sweep her off her feet...if only she'll give you the nod...you're not going to stop at "just once" are you?
if you get a second chance...you're never gonna stop, right?
Nice piece...

[deeps]

Wow! This is wonderful and amazing.
I really like the emotion in this write.

[JENY]

Yes…I understand…..
The pathos behind your lines…
I too am going through an ordeal similar to this….
But I am very much optimistic…

[Albatross]

I feel like this piece conveys such a longing for something.. perhaps something that once was experienced, but is now lost in some way..

Anyway, this write is touching, emotionally colourful, thought provoking, and beautiful. Loved it. :)

[ShaneBerry]

very good repitition, there is a good rythm to this peice!

[C.J.G.]

very, very nice. I love how it starts off with tangible longings, and then moves to unseen desires. great work.

[Dinesh Sairam]

"just once
i want to buy you a 'kolhapuri chappal'
made from the finest leather that's quite supple."

I really don't know why you wrote this. I've never worn a Kolhapuri chappal; Maybe it feels good to wear, But truly, the first stanza is a bit off.

I loved this best -

"just once
i wish for you to consider me as your own
letting me enter thy pristine love zone."

And there's no problem with the rhymes (Except 'me' and 'decree' which seems bit forced). Otherwise, it's a nice poem. You can, in all ways, change it into a wonderful poem.

[Liza]

makes me think of the song "just once"
very creative, smart and smooth
almost hear a melody with this one

[Ashley.M.E]

This is a really well written poem, I can actually really relate. It poem is peaceful and vivid, nicely done in my own opinion.

[SamBug]

Wow, this was great. I like the repetition you used. It makes the piece much stronger! :)

[DeadToTheWorld]

this was a very wonderful poem I read it twice :) good job keep up the good work :)