Amour

the emptiness will forever remain ..

My life was brilliant , my life was pure
I was leading it without much of a furor
But one fine day , i saw an angel
A beautiful face with a dazzling glaze
I fell for her , put out my heart
Yet all i got was dejection by far
I don't think i would see her again
But the moments that we shared will never be the same
I cant think , I cant even drink
And i just don't know what to do
Cause this truth always dawns upon me
That i will never again be with you .....

Author's Note

was inspired by james blunt's "you are beautiful"

Reviews

[clauds294]

I really enjoyed this poem, it was simple but to the heart. All the emotion is right there in the front. You captured it beautifully. And i can really relate to what you are saying. keep writing

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

You write so very transparently at times,your heart bleeds with sorrow,dejection and you put it out for all to see.All one can say in return is that hold on,everything will be fine..how do we know,cause we have been there too.

[*** Hey Jude***]

So sad, but you can be with the one you love, if they want to be with you. Best wishes on that! Sincerely ~ Jude

[JENY]

That i will never again be with you .....
My be you are true…
You may never be again with her….
It is a pity….
But you can see many…..
Who can charm you with their wands of love…..pure love …
Try it…..

[R.S. Wilder]

Simple and to the point. In twelve lines you've captured ordinary life, being shot by cupids arrow, rejection, heartache, and change.
Nice.

[DeadToTheWorld]

I rlly liked this i'm sure every one knows how it feels to loose someone they love :) i rlly enjoyed reading this, I like the song you were inspired to write this after ^^

[Alicante lullaby]

i just loved the last two lines...so true.

[Prateeksha Khot]

this has become my another favourite from your works. I am glad you did not use couplets this time

[indu]

have read a lot of "i will never be with you again" poems.. but your poem is better than all of them. ecellant construction, love it

[Hamkar]

I like the French title, maybe you could link it a bit more to the poem, maybe add a little bit of French or end with the word Amour.