Life akin to HELL

what's this life with no desires , no hopes ?

                           

 The horrific thoughts of losing you in which i dwell
Makes my life no better than a living hell …

The path of love isn’t easy with thorns strewn all along
If only you had let me walk on, you wouldn’t have done anything wrong …

Why is it that God inflicts pain on me from time to time?
It seems I am being rewarded for committing a heinous crime …

The man who doth good has good done to him is what they say
If this holds true then why am I in such utter dismay !!

The woeful cries and the bitter sighs, no one will ever know
Cause a cheerful countenance is what I’ll always show …

Reviews

[Albatross]

You really do have a beautiful way with poetry. This poem.. I especially loved the last two lines, in pain yet always wearing a cheerful front. You seemed to completely shift your train of thought after the second stanza, which was a little bit confusing. I personally think you could expound more upon this, especially the story you were unraveling at the beginning. Otherwise, fantastic write, I loved it:)

[clauds294]

This is a great poem, incredible flow to it. It has great emotion. You have great talent.

[JENY]

Yes that is the law of life….
Resilience is indispensable……
Without which….life will be a hell……

[R.S. Wilder]

I liked this poem - the second stanza was odd - as if you got derailed for a moment. All in all, it was good.

[Prateeksha Khot]

Another beautiful poem from you. loved it. Do keep writing

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

It is hard, putting on a brave face, but if we don't, we get stomped on. From my own experience it is better to smile in the face of adversity, no matter how low we go. being stoic, is pretty much what it is all about.

Smiling at you

Tai

[DeadToTheWorld]

I Love Love Love this the way it rhymes and intertwines with each word I truly loved reading this this is a good write ^^ keep up the good work this is ever so wonderful

[Dupree]

You are a very impressive poet. This is yet another amazing piece. The ryhme scheme works amazingly. You are a very good poet and you have to continue