Broken

cries of a deserted heart ..

Trespassing into the corridors of my heart
you had the eternal right to scourge and shred it in parts.

Once you had left, i meticulously started building a wall
though at times the emptiness echoed like an accordion playing in a hall.

Shielded from all the pains and miseries, it now stood numb
it hardly mattered when someone quoted me as 'emotionally dumb'

But destiny had more turmoil waiting for me
the heavens up there said "there is much more for you to see"

Suddenly you showed up and asked me to knock down the wall
I feared cause i knew it could lead to my final fall.

Yet i went ahead for you were my heart's rightful owner
with a hope that things might change for me , the lachrymose loner.

How lively the small abode had started to seem
the joys spreading their radiance , my eyes had begun to gleam.

For a moment i had forgotten that i was the chosen one
sooner or later i was destined to be shunned.

And then the day finally arrived
that unfortunate moment, to avoid which i had so fiercely strived.

My angel said "it's suffocating in here"
I asked her to leave, as if i didn't care.

She misinterpreted my words and once again left my heart
I couldn't be lucky for long, i knew this right from the start.

I don't give a damn to the b*****s who now roam around
this heart of mine where there is pain and gore profound.

The dreams that i had so dearly kept
flowed away with the bloody tears that i wept.

"Times will change" is an axiom so fake
this heart is burning down with every puff that i take.
 
The torn pieces at times remind themselves of the angel who had lived here
their throttling voices whispering "come back for we still care" ... 

Author's Note

just wrote what i felt this sullen morning

Reviews

[Ruth]

"Times will change" is an axiom so fake
this heart is burning down with every puff that i take."

These lines are profound within this unravelling situation :) I particularly the word axiom in the line! Odd choice of word but used here perfectly :)

There is such caution thrown to the breeze here, once depths have been reached, what next? Do we care?!

Awesome work

xx

[An owl on the moon]

What a deeply moving piece.. there is so much longing.. such a sense of love and loss... And in the end.. in the midst of the turmoil and desperation.. there are voices calling out for that beautiful love that once resided there. Profoundly moving.

[deeps]

This is awesome, I really enjoyed this, so full of emotion.

[JENY]

My god…..
It is really a destiny ….
God had determined…to bring out the poet in you….
And He does it allowing you to pass through bitter experiences….
Most poets are born like that…….

[Albatross]

I really enjoyed reading this.. Sad but beautiful. Made me think about a few things. Wonderfully written, love the imagery you incorporated into this.

[ShaneBerry]

very deep, this morning must've sucked lol,jk. but i enjoyed it :}

[R.S. Wilder]

"Trespassing into the corridors of my heart
you had the eternal right to scourge and shred it in parts."

These two lines are deep and they speak a million other words that appear shadowed behind it's meaning.
It speaks to me on a personal level, and because of that I will be biased and say that it moved me until my heart broke (so I loved it)....
Bravo.

[SamBug]

This was very impressive. Wow!

[Tate Morgan]

A sad heart ois a dying soul learn to turn it off and repair to a time before you were injured

[Dupree]

Wow. This is the first of your works I've read and I'm glad it was. This is a very impressive poem. You can feel the emotions. Personally it speaks to me. I can't wait to read more of your works.

- Dupree