Last fight

i gave it my all yet finally had to fall ..

Men will certainly take fright

When they'll see me as high as a kite !

I know everyone including You will say "this isn't right"

You'll all end up blaming me for my shoddy plight.

The ensuing events will surely cause strife

But come what may i'll never take flight.

There is this desire to be with You on a lonely night

When i can once again caress Your glistening hair in the moonlight.

To keep ‘This’ ray of hope shining bright

I won't go down without giving a last fight ...

Reviews

[emmajoy]

You certainly know how to express your feelings and each two line segment has its own air of sadness. I do feel that this is a little forced in parts because you're wanting to use the -ife sound at the end of each line though .. think it could have alternated to give a softer, more flowing ring to it.

A sweet phrase: 'When i can once again caress Your glistening hair in the moonlight.'

[*** Hey Jude***]

I think you should always fight for the one you love. It is only fair that you have joy in your life! :-) ~ Judi

[Albatross]

I agree with Emma, the rhyming did sound a little bit forced.. Otherwise, this piece is fairly good. I love the third stanza, it drives forth such a determination in making things work, no matter how hard it may be. The whole poem was beautiful.

[Alicante lullaby]

Monet.beautiful...

[Dani]

The moonlight, my friend. Always there observing the plight of man. It really doesnt matter if you think you will cause strife. You should do want you want with this complicated life. D
PS Glad to see that hope!

[clauds294]

it had a great flow and i love how everything is pulled together at the end :) Great job!

[Prateeksha Khot]

that was really great !!

[Octob3r Star]

Nice, Thanks For Sharing

[deeps]

Such a wonderful rhyme scheme and flow.
I like this

[Chassitie Linnaea Nicol..]

I GIVE IT A 8