Lost

wandering in oblivion after losing the battle for the 'one' i had so dearly sought

How difficult nowadays life seems

The rigmarole i once hated , now feels like a dream .

In this heart of mine once there was light

As i had hopes pinned on my last fight .

Time and again I bared my all to endure the whip

Yet good times always somehow managed to give me a slip .

Now as darkness engulfs the horizon , the outcome is almost clear

The battle is almost lost , a painful fact that i have to bear .

I might feel satisfied cause with all my strength i fought

But the horrifying outcome will always unsettle me as i lost my precious , the one i had so dearly sought ...

May be i missed the quintessential kick that was needed for a start

Or maybe lady luck never came by to play her much needed part .

Whatever be the reason , the outcome makes me feel wrought

Coupled with the painful reminders that it has with itself brought .

"Life is all about going on" thou may say

But is it truly a 'LYF' if i could never have it my own way ???

Author's Note

'LYF' is written that way purposely . so don't consider it as a lingo error

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Good poem bro. I guess you have experienced things which make your poems brutal discoveries of yourself. You always write from your heart everytime. I hope life finds a way to heal you.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was a good poem. I agree with Judi she is correct. This was good though. Thanks for sharing. :)

[*** Hey Jude***]

I believe anyone can change and make youir live what you desire. Just make your needs known and respect for those wishes will follow. ~ Judi

[JENY]

Great……
I have no tears left to cry for you…
Stoic…
Pain can give birth to a real poet

[Randy`s Princess]

very emotive full of reason very nice write well done

[MiidniightSoul]

It was a really good poem. Very well and beautifully written. I especially liked the line " In this heart of mine once there was light as i had hopes pinned on my last fight ." Very powerful. Keep it up. ^__^

[Lydia Blackwell]

I am showing my age a bit- what's an LYF? ...LOL...Anyways- here is some constructive advice... The poem had many good points and was heartfelt. It also had a few problems. Some of the content suffers because of the need to rhyme. I'm not sure if text lingo should be in poetry. that is purely MY opinion- it might be just my age. But I do understand tragedy of the subject matter. maybe a re-write is in order?

[SamBug]

It was a good poem. I enjoyed reading it. It's not your best but some of it didn't flow perfectly. Other than that, I thought it was a good topic and good in general.

[Ashley.M.E]

hmm, not exactly my favorite, but a well done poem in all.

[Dinesh Sairam]

This was sailing smoothly until the end, I have to say.. The last stanza just didn't fit in (Again, it might just be me!). All the other stanzas are perfect :) (Well, seems like you won't give up on killing the language, lol). Keep writing.