The journey

The journey

A Poem by the_stoic
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hope is a good thing ; probably the best of things and every good thing is mercilessly butchered to death :D

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Life is a mystic journey , with illusions aplenty
To live a simple one is what we crave
But like a twitched fork , it always behaves .
A linear sequence of scares awaits
To take them head on is what everyone hates .
But the bountiful of pleasures that lies before
Lures one and all to nullify the threats , whilst moving ahead .
At times we find ourselves in despair
With no one to speak to, no one to share .
In times like these , life seems to be a curse
Perhaps for the misdeeds of our previous birth .
To get respite from the turmoil that keeps unfolding
We either drone in pain , or keep on playing the blame game
Despite all this , we keep striving and making efforts
Our souls giving the backup , a gleam of hope doing the patch up !!
This is how life turns out to be
Springing surprises mostly during times of crisis .
To stay alive is all we need to do
Cause the basic fact remains the same , it ain’t anything new
" It’s the love for your life , that will always see you through "

© 2010 the_stoic


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At times we find ourselves in despair
With no one to speak to, no one to share .
In times like these , life seems to be a curse
Perhaps for the misdeeds of our previous birth .
To get respite from the turmoil that keeps unfolding
We either drone in pain , or keep on playing the blame game
Despite all this , we keep striving and making efforts
Our souls giving the backup , a gleam of hope doing the patch up !
This is exactly how i felt today,there are many a times i feel,as if i am carrying scars on my soul of a past life..but to voice so would be called silly,yet when life throws you in pain,angst,sorrow again and again,you tend to question yourself why me??..
Very weel expressed and i loved the way it ended on a positive and universal truth which we tend to forget and ought to be reminded.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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If I were to re-arrange this poem into sentences, I'd say this is an epic work. But since, this is a 'Poem', I unfortunately look at the theme and format too (Though imagery is what I always see first, which is in lust numbers in this poem, don't worry about that). I suggest it to be a sonnet, or at least in some meter (Suggestion : Iambic pentameter) or if you really would go to alter this remotely (Which I'm sure any poet wouldn't, lol), you can make it a double-etheree. Again, these are just suggestion, the poem is great just the way it is. I guess the suggestions are to make it all the more perfect :) Kudos.

Keep writing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was practically amazing. You used the write words and imagery to make me see this all in my head. Amazing job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


To stay alive is all we need to do
Cause the basic fact remains the same , it ain’t anything new
" It’s the love for your life , that will always see you through "

I love these lines here. This is amazing

Posted 14 Years Ago


" It’s the love for your life , that will always see you through " I Love this. It speaks of truth. Hope wains, but faith, and belief in love endures. D

Posted 14 Years Ago


Is hope a happy outlook? That seemed to be at least part of the message.

I believe less in hope, which is somewhat compressing in a way, and more in the fact that I should carry a happy paradigm of life... If you don't mind my asking, why do you believe hope is not a good thing?

Very nice poem, thought provoking, inspiring, and touching. I love your sense of wordplay, beautiful. Thanks for sharing:)

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is a very touching poem, though you may not believe that hope is a good thing, it gave you an awesome poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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