the literal wording flowed smoothly
the emotions felt like they were genuinely expressed
sometimes i wondered if you were asking forgiveness from a lover and other times i was wondering if the forgiveness you really seek is from self for giving so much to another that does not give back...
you inspired a lot of emotion and that in itself makes a great write.
I was wondering if it worked for you...did your plaints bridge the gulf between you... There are two choices we have...either we choose to forgive or we choose to take offence...It would be hard to question your veracity with such a heartfelt appeal...so...she either forgave you or she's not ready to let you out of the doghouse yet...you stated you case eloquently...I hope she forgives you...you're in limbo land until she does...
There's nothing better than makeup sex...lol
You should never have to asked forgiveness for loving someone. I hope that special someone makes you happy once again, waving her magical wand with the only tender hands you desire to touch you. Word ~ Judi :-)
wow- this was a great poem. the words are beautiful. they touch deeply.
I love this poem and I am putting it in my library.
I know this kind of pain and it is consuming. I hope you can recover either way.
But remember- words are the easy part- if she comes back, you must stand behind those words...
It makes me sad you feel the need for forgiveness from someone that hurt you so bad. Its your call, just make sure thats what you want! Insightful write ~ Jude :-)
Your words have both a vast, universal feel, and a deeply emotive, personal feel as well. The repetition of the primary thought brings such a rhythmic flow to your piece. Powerful, moving work that sings of grace, mercy, and love...
Firstly *smiles and a special mention for the review of iota and Liza.They were very true and lovely.
Yes this poem is so very lovely,powerful and striking cause of the emotions here which are so very raw and so very honest..and yes I do agree what love does to us...indeed how it breaks our heart and beyond...basically how it breaks us.We are so keen to win our love back,that we can do and be anything for our loved one but in the process what we lose is our self respect.Just want to say something that I myself do not follow at times,Nothing is more important than one person that is 'you'..
I can't help but wonder, what did you do that was so awful to lose her? retorical quesiton yes but it is what I thought. There is one here on WC that I hope will read this to see that men when left by a love do miss more of them than the physical. It is so difficult loving someone like this and not having it returned it seems to only intensify the love and almost need for them. I hope that if she doesn't return you will be able to recover and discover that even after a heart break like this, the heart will recover and will love again, it is our strongest organ and it is durable.
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mein pyar mein belive nahi karta tha abhi tak
but ashiqi kya bna dete hai bande ko ab jana
seriously ab mughe pyar karne se dar lagta hai
she would have been really wonderful
keep doing its wonderful to read ur poems
the literal wording flowed smoothly
the emotions felt like they were genuinely expressed
sometimes i wondered if you were asking forgiveness from a lover and other times i was wondering if the forgiveness you really seek is from self for giving so much to another that does not give back...
you inspired a lot of emotion and that in itself makes a great write.
i won't go about describing myself cause it'll end up as a self deprecatory saga .. my poems are there to speak for me .
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