Emotions - an abstract fallacy

after reeling through so much of turmoil i have really started questioning the existence of emotions ...

"I am emotional too" is what thou say
Yet compassion is a forbidden virtue , thou always portray .

Herein lies a person who cried his heart out for your sake
Did you by any means gauge his tears to be fake ?

You help others with complicacies in their love life
Then why is it that you let your own , get replete with strife ?

Love isn't a child's play ; in the course of our lives its presence does matter
Yet with your own hands you shatter his dreams that he had showcased before you on a platter .

Mistakes he has done , none of which he denies
The punishments are but being overdone , as silent tears he cries .

You bring him in , just to throw him out
Time and again obliterating him , as if he is a wretched lout .

How can you forget the times when he stood by you
Except out of love , what else is there to construe ?

Today as he is battling to somehow stay alive
All he gets from you is a token of painful jibes !

Truly emotions are an abstract fallacy , a wholesome lie
Rather than get intertwined in this web , i would have preferred to simply die ...

Reviews

[Dinesh Sairam]

"Compassion is a forbidden virtue" - Well put ;) But avoid repeating words atleast in the consecutive lines (Thou) :)

Second line of the fourth stanza was too big, you can shorten it, just so it fits in with the other lines.

"Emotions are an abstract fallacy" - Though I don't accept with the fact, I should say it's beautifully written. :D

Lastly, the message is easily conveyed.. and that's what one wants from a poem (Apart from the imagery and rhyme, of course).

PS. I love using archaic words too ;) If you're interested, go here : http://phrontistery.info/archaic.html :)

[clauds294]

Amazing write! Keep it at it. :P

[Ruth]

Sometimes emotions are ridicule! I feel that too at times, think we all do, if only there was some sort of cut off mechanism to survive! lol
Beautifully portrayed love!
xx

[An owl on the moon]

You've written both an insightful and richly woven tome to this notion of emotions, their reality and their impact on us. There is a depth they can give us in life, and yet also a profound pain... You've brought up so many questions and issues we must all face every day.

[Abdul Aziz]

Painful. Really painful. Your writes always carry the hues of the pain of broken dreams. You always write your heart out everytime.
Emotions do matter, mate. I hope you do come out of this turmoil.

[*** Hey Jude***]

It sounds so familiar, and I feel the pain you share through your words. I hope you realize doing want you want and need for yourself to be happy is all that matters! I can relate, to be in a relationship that is not real...I would much rather die. Peace be with you ~ Judi

[JENY]

Please stoic….
I can feel the pain in you….
Please do not make me too…
Bleed in pain….
Because…your lines are like sharp edged swords…

[ShaneBerry]

i agree with dinesh, alittle bit to much repeating, but the rest is amazing

[Randy`s Princess]

I like this one to you write very well "Truly emotions are an abstract fallacy a wholesome lie" I love that line well written

[Lydia Blackwell]

I know these feelings well. sometimes the people we love are incapable of loving us back. It hurts. I really understand your pain and the way that you work through it. Keep writing. You will get to a better place.

[Iota]

It is awful to be in love with someone who doesn't seem to care back. It is like being in a pit with no bottom or top. This was a great write of emotions and feelings.