Motherless

wrote for contest that required use of a set of ten words

 

My heart dwells in grief

A voice guides my through my infancy

Awaited I emerge in loss

Far from the dream he did posses

A nursery filled with childish sounds

While a father weeps for a motherless soul

Reviews

[Salvatore Buttaci]

A poem straight from the heart! Great!

[Vesa Lee]

Short but powerful.
No words are wasted.
The emotion are accessible to all who read.
Great write.

[Anna Veronica]

This is really good!
Just a little problem...line 2 should be "A voice guides ME through my infancy" (not "my").

[Helena]

Great write with wonderful impact on the reader.
Much enjoyed.

Helena

[Tovli]

a poem with a shallow feel, filled with sorrow and grief.
i liked the compact form; a blunted affect--a very nice use of all the
words! tovli

[DeeWV]

You write of a sorrow many have faced.
Thanks for sharing it here.

Dee

[Chaos]

Very sad. Which contest did you enter?

[Lady V]

Wow, what a message is sent with this poem. Its heartfelt and real. I applaud you.

Great Piece

Live, Love and Learn

Lady V