THAT DAY THE RAIN FELL..😢

And if i had known i maybe wouldnt/would've done it all again with just a little difference in the begining,
 The happiness along with the sad days,the tears and s**t that i couldnt control and itd seem intentional whenever they appeared,
 Somethings seemed they'd never change,yet i know change is inevitable,complication is a minor definition,
 It may seem im vanitised,tho left to me these things wouldn't be necessary,just reference from a peasants perspective,
 Once i assumed things would be much easier,just like most other assumptions,they're normally off,
 Its gonna get better and this is all a phase, that much i know,and with my spirit and core its a definite posssibility,
 Dont ask for much,when you do it never seems to be fulfill,think the pressure lay on your shoulders,and the burden seems unbearing,
 These miracle puddles of salt that drip down my cheeks are uncontrollable,probably from all the built up mental tention that surrounds everyday thoughts,
 Just trying and gonna keep trying cause its too easy to give up,id rather keep trying before throwing in the towel and calling it quits.
#livelovelaugh♚

Reviews

[everton ellis]

Gabriel thanks for the heads up..glad you got the picture tho

[Gabriel]

So, this is good but it could be better.
It has some grammar mistakes, some words that don't exist (vanitised) and many things I'd change and that you can change to make it a good poem.

Let me know if you want me to help you!

[Sami Khalil]

"the pressure lay on your shoulders,and the burden seems unbearing,
These miracle puddles of salt that drip down my cheeks are uncontrollable,probably from all the built up mental tention that surrounds everyday thoughts,"