Falling Gravity

I never realized
       just how bright my ceiling was.
Or how comfortable
       my floor was.
on my tip toes
reaching around and
holding on tight.
             this is where I'd like to stay
                    okay?
       because time is irrelevant,
       and my heart beat is hectic.

nothing has ever felt this right.

no rush.
no panic
or worry or awkward-ness.
just your smile
and light in my eyes.

is this what
             falling
             feels like?


because if there is a
       point of no return
       I want to get there fast.
tangle myself up
in you and find myself
             there waiting
       wondering why it took
                 us so long to remember
             how to keep breathing.
           [this feels natural.]
like its been waiting
       hiding, on the prowl
always expecting,
but patient.
            
             gravity just happens.
             there wasn't any other way
                    around it.

Reviews

[Jon Cooper]

Wow. I love this one, and it's a new favorite of mine among your writing :]

My favorite part (if I HAD to choose, and it's hard to do with this one) would be:
"because if there is a
point of no return
I want to get there fast."
Or:
"I never realized
just how bright my ceiling was.
Or how comfortable
my floor was."

I know the feeling perfectly and you portray it so well :]

[Stephanie W.]

I adore this!
It's playful and thoughtful and heartfelt.
You captured this moment beautifully.
: ]

[O'Maoilriann]

I loved the style of this--very unique. It is something you should definitely hold onto, build on. The style aside, I just really liked the words. It is very happy, somehow uplifting. Well done!

[kaycee]

blah...this makes me happy! i can feel the difference from many of your other poems, the lightness of it...
" gravity just happens.
there wasn't any other way
around it."

love it.