fishnet

I am caught in the happenstance

of me liking you, a net tangled

                                tight around my ankles

I can not be free of the blush

your smile makes my cheeks disclose.

no matter how quickly I try to

wrap myself up away from you

constantly thoughts of your eyes

mingle their way into my mind

 

and i am losing it.

ready to give in and just confess.

preparing to lose friendship for just

the chance to be…

 

                not scene enough

                skinny enough

                pretty enough

                photogenic enough

                                talented enough.

                i am everything

                that you are not looking for

                in a girl friend.

 

                right?

 

Reviews

[Ben Walton]

know that feeling.
i love the imagery and the reality wrapped around the imaginary. really, it's intriguing. the description of the blush is just wonderful. and "happenstance" is such a great word, especially for an opening line.

i dug it a lot. i always love reading your reviews and figured now that i have a spare second i owe you a hello and a thank you. So hello, and thank you :)

but hey, if this holds any kind of truth, go for it. I did, and i'm the happiest i've ever been. :) good luck to you.

[Courtney Caddiwampus]

I like how you compared your feelings with a net.

"am caught in the happenstance

of me liking you, a net tangled

tight around my ankles"

It gives the feeling that it is not hard to cut through, but alone you will never be able to.

[Stephanie W.]

This has a gorgeous pattern of captivity weaved through it.
" a net tangled"
I can relate to the feeling.
And you convey it gracefully, in a personal manner, yet one that can still touch people universally.
:] another poem well-done.

[Sun Dog]

Very nice. There's something alluring about this. Sounds like my high school a bit. I like that you used images and words that are unique and that adds a lot to this.

[Tim Lawless]

Amazing as always, Rachel. I love it.

"not scene enough"--that's actually a really sad commentary on this person (if it's about who I think it's about). But it's a great line.