Ages

I can barely keep my eyes open

not because of exhaustion. but because I

have no desire to wake up again.

 

 

 

and tonight is running circles through

my head. Something was off

not quite right, yet is wasn’t bad.

nothing meshed, we didn’t click

or fit correctly. But our pieces

aren’t obtuse and can coincide

nicely.  

every word I said, spilled out roughly,

you set me on edge, but didn’t

tip me.

 

 

I giggled more tonight

than I have in ages. My

laugh was the one thing uncensored.

my arm spent all evening hiding

and I know you’d never

care to understand any part of

who I am. But it was just

enough to be able to smile

and give in to being young for once.

 

you’re lyrics are amazing, and

i’m sure you’ll never give

tonight a second thought,

just keep moving on

searching for light headed girls

that will hear your misplaced rumors

and take them in stride

                                                [away from you]

But I’m not going anywhere.

another thing I’m sure you’d

                never think of.

 

Reviews

[PianoandPage]

mmm. nice melancholic quality here (my fave!). it has a sort of relaxed tragedy to it... she knows that she can never really be the thing he treasures and yet she is happy to be whatever she is. sort of.

the "uncensored" laughing really caught my eye. i love that image.

also "light headeded girls" is brilliant. nice way to say blondes without saying blondes. also "light" sort of implies a doublemeaning here both in hue and in disposition. lol.

your line breaks were awkard and conveyed the atmosphere and emotion of this piece so well. great job!