Something Short. Maybe Not Sweet.

I am insomnia driven with poetry rushing through my system.

this keyboard’s space key, slowing down the process,

but my head is still a million miles ahead of these

stuttering keys.

 

There is an odd feeling of need, or maybe

want growing. I am finding myself running

circles round something that I didn’t think

I even had the energy to run for.

 

And with some boy crawled up

under my skin, I kinda on the edge again.

 

 

 

Reviews

[kaycee]

I know the feeling. Both of having a poem in your head and just fighting to get it out before it disappears as well as that of infatuation coming on like a cold.

For some reason I come up with my poems as I am falling asleep...which prompts me to get out of bed and write them down before they fade away. It's really annoying haha.

[alesuriko]

Interesting write. Certainly short and compact full of all shorts of wonderfully dark emotions and imagery. The last line has a little grammatical issues "I kinda on the edge again" doesn't quite make completely sense. But the rest is great. I really enjoyed the stuttering keys part. I can certainly relate to insomnia, that's for sure. Well done.

[Tony Hwilka]

fine write and I can really understand your problem -- having a boy under you skin -- not only will keep you awake it could be very painful. Tony

[nocturnalbeast]

It feels like I'm inside ur head for a short period of time..!!!

[Aaron B.]

I really love this :)

it short put really conveys the emotion of late night insomnia writing!!!

as always your poetry is beautiful keep up the good work!!!