YOU HAVE MAIL; (A LOVE SONG )

How to communicate, in the modern world,

waiting

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  W  a    i      t        i          n                  g,

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    time stamp (11 minutes ago )

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     fluidity gone

mud and silt restricting

              sweet river flow song

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Staring

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S   t    a      r       i         n              g

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static feedback     ( blinking eye )

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   frozen screen

 sobering conversation breaking

         rocks of emotion upon the

   sterile reminder of    ....

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     time stamp ( 8 minutes ago )

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Typing

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T  y    p      i        n         g

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               Staring

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                                     waiting

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     the urge for communication

drowned in strangled yawns

          and     ....

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          W  A    I      T        I          N                   G

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     " Are you gone ? "

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   the sliver- tooth

       of curtained dawn,

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-blinds my blood shot 

                                   eyes

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abruptly awake

    eating crunchy nut depression

and cold coffee blues for breakfast

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       timestamp ( 8 hours ago )

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     " Seriously, are you f*****g gone ? "

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             MESSAGE NOT SENT

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you are not connected

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        running diagnostics

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DO NOT SWITCH OFF

 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yeah, it's a nice try...but the damn technical glitches can drive us crazy and away.
conversations cut off in mid=stream that make us think the other person is mad or hurt at something we said.
ugh...nothing like face to face romance
this poem is a perfect sample of what it is like.
j.

[gram linski]

thanks so much j., your reading and enjoying of my poems mean a lot, the confusion and misunderstanding that a simple circuit board can cause haha, hope you are keeping well, take care

[barleygirl]

Back a while, I used to get perturbed when people did not answer me for fifteen minutes or an hour or a day. But now I've joined the ranks & I never answer anyone either, until I get good & ready to. Why interrupt my real life until there's a natural pause? It's definitely not a communication style for the needy *wink! wink!* Your poetry, as usual, kills as a word painting on the addictive aspects of sniffing too much ethernet (((HUGS)))

[gram linski]

haha, I do love a good sniff of ethernet, thanks for the great review Margie , hope you are keeping well,

[Einstein Noodle]

without reading one word ..I love this free form .. the look of it says a lot in itself says i! and your poem is spot on .. tho I do not text nor tweet nor twitter .. I do still talk by way of phone ;) so I have not had conversations of a romantic nature but I do relate ... when getting "on line help" ... its exactly like that ... it's like ... are you there? .... are you still there???? and WAITING >;[ ... reading this opens the door to laugh at me self a bit ... it really isn't worth the anger .. luv on ya gram! always good to hear from you ... right here at the Cafe' ;)
E.

[gram linski]

hey, E, how are you keeping man, aye the art of seduction with a time gap pause, s**t, message undo, message undo, haha, thanks for reading, always enjoy your keen mind, take care,

[Einstein Noodle]

;) ............................

[Chris Shaw]

Have to agree with J. Face to face or even telephone, but computer conversations can be a pain in the backside. What with the glitches and then the concerns that you may have been misunderstood. It ain't easy :)

Chris

[gram linski]

thanks for reading, Chris, aye this t'internet s**t is fraught with dangers and misunderstanding, appreciate the review, take care down there and get the dinghy out,

[Chris Shaw]

Sun today, probably plenty of rain to come. Take care over the border :))