The Bite Of A Cloud

The Bite Of A cloud;

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the falling rain, the  powered, powdered 

angst of broken glass, snorted

instead of dreams,       a

                             cummulummbus

                                                             effect

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      of matter over mind

a dampened sky / hung out

            wrung out to dry

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the cloud bite sinks deep

     the fangs of sublime

like a melting forest

     face of a killer

and the dreams of the dream

     without hunter, or guile,

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snapped neck tendons

crunch and creak and croak,

and break and moan

as my teeth fall short

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    of the bite of a dream

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                 falling    -

                      cotton candy

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felt between my rotten gums 

                                                   and I

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spit out vapor  and 

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                                              provide

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                 (the fogged reflection,)

 (of the )/

                dream

                                                              

Reviews

[Ruth]

Dreamtime is never a simple process, this really holds such impact, I find that in your poetry there is always an opportunity to walk myriad paths throughout. Astonishing in its vibrant details and places the reader on edge for they too know the depth of such happenings...brilliant gram :)

[gram linski]

thanks so much Ruth, aye you are right, we all have the dreamscape wandering through our lives, glad you enjoyed, appreciate the kind words as always, take care,

[barleygirl]

Nice to read you again, Gram. Your poem is packed with roiling imagery & knife-edged attitude. I'm reminded of how clouds have become the enemy in California . . . so dry here, we freak to see summer clouds which often bring dry lightning & wildfires. Northern California was toast this fire season, but luckily no nearby fires for me & I'm very thankful (((HUGS)))

[gram linski]

hey, Margie how you keeping girl, glad you enjoyed my knife edge attitude, haha, I may use that line, you guys have been on fire quite a lot maybe California is actually the seven circles of hell with LA at it's heart, hope you are keeping well

[Chris Shaw]

When a cloud bites you, you know you are in trouble. These lines read like the worse type of nightmare, or a bad trip (not that I've ever been there, just read about it). You really get into the pit here, yes the pit and the pendelum territory, that terrified me. Some cracking lines gram.

Chris

[gram linski]

thanks as ever for the great review, Chris, the pit and the pendulum, haha, not the first time I have had Poe mentioned in a review, i don't see it myself, I'm a dour b*****d as opposed to a great writer, thanks again for your time and support

[Einstein Noodle]

man! so intense!! this is the place where one first gets the wound .. devastating .. well penned gram!! hits home to me like a sledge hammer to the chest .. love it!
E.

[gram linski]

you are so kind, Mr E, aye the bite of a cloud is always the first wound, always appreciate your kind words, thanks for reading, take care over there,

[Einstein Noodle]

you too gram!

[light and ashes]

This sounds more like a nightmare to me than a dream, but it definitely doesn't lack originality. I love the third stanza, and the bit about a cloud having fangs.

[gram linski]

thanks light and ashes, cool avatar, nightmares are just dark places where good dreams occur, glad you enjoyed this, appreciate the great review,

[light and ashes]

Thank you, I picked it because of a poem I wrote years ago.