YOU / ME

I feel you

punching the wall

pounding the floor

shaking the roof

chewing glass

breaking things -

anything -

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I hear you

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talking to yourself

laughing manically

shouting quietly

chewing glass

breaking things -

anything -

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I feel you

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I hear you

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I am you

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you inside my head

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hey, you !

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can you feel me

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punching the walls

laughing manically

pounding the floor

chewing glass

breaking things -

anything -

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       Everything

       Nothing

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whole lotta

 lovin' goin' on 

Reviews

[Papaya]

Hi Gram, this leaves me with a few different trains of thought.
As an outsider looking on in the way I visualize this, I can see a power struggle of sorts between dueling personalities. Just my thoughts, I rarely interpret these things correctly.
Seems like a happy ending though. I like that.

My other thought was that it might be an abusive relationship.

[gram linski]

thanks, Ana, the only abuse was self inflicted and the dueling personalities were internal , but there was a happy ending, , appreciate the visit

[Chris Shaw]

I guess gram you were having a real bad day. Hope you are in a happier place now.

Chris

[gram linski]

hanks, Chris, as with all my poems there is hope in the dark, just hope the light is not a fast approaching train, lol, It was written a while ago, I am in a happier place now, posting the older ones gives me perspective , appreciate your views, keep writing those cool poems, I am a fan of your haiku, might have said that before,

[Chris Shaw]

Aw thanks gram:)

[gram linski]

you're welcome, Chris, take care down there

[emily]

i'm not sure if this is what it's about, but the way i interpret the poem is this--

someone struggling with their internalized thoughts. it's taking over them, becoming them almost. they fight it but they can't. well, until they can, as shown in the ending. they learn self love.

i like it. nice job :)

[gram linski]

thanks for reading, emily, aye you are right about the internal dialogue, and that duality of mind, fighting itself, glad you enjoyed, appreciate you visiting my page, I will check out your page over the weekend, thanks again