Under The Dark

Hearing spines

crack,

in torment

I laugh

A devious, jagged

thing,

dangerous,

A razor blade

smile

of knives

Daggers of ice

smouldering,

a burning blue

flame

A broken knee

of triumph

and pride

To kiss you with

my Death

my little Death

my last,

And dreaming

of

Monkeys

in clown suits

screaming

Their hair matted

psychosis

As they fight

to the

Death

(with knives)

I sleep 

Reviews

[Eilis]

There’s a lot going on here that is a bit terrifying, but I strangely feel like I ought to laugh at it. Perhaps it’s like an acid trip beginning to tip toward something you’d like to escape. There’s potential for the mind to process things in different ways.

With the title I am thinking it’s nightmares. But it also has the feel of PTSD. The soldier coming home to find the darkness has followed him. The things we encounter uninitiated can lead into deep darkness, but once it’s done, it’s done and we can’t get ourselves back.

Maybe it’s your monkeys in clown suits that are trying to drag me away to the humorous side. It’s like the clown in some of your other poems. Representing sense of control perhaps. I don’t know.

I feel weird for saying that I really like it. The dark images feel empowering at points. Like taking back one’s power in a place where things can be worked out without real harm.

But it’s sharp and brutal. That broken knee and little death. It leaves me reeling in the head a bit. Like. I don’t know what like.

I guess it’s the I don’t know that makes me like it. It’s scary, but kind of invites you in, in a way. What the hell am I even saying. I don’t know. I just like the poem. Maybe that’s enough this time.

[gram linski]

that's more than enough, thanks again, Eilis, my poetry is littered with monks and clowns two (Janus tongued) faces of the same god, made perfect sense to me at the time

[Curtis.Lenker]

Very descriptive. Many great metaphors in this poem. Good write.

[gram linski]

thanks Awesome one, glad you enjoyed, is that what your friends call you

[Curtis.Lenker]

yes actually it is

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Filled with jagged shards of metaphors that rebound from Dante's inferno and coat the reader in the manure of fear. Such effective brief and dramatic, tense verse sir!

[gram linski]

Thanks John, I thought it was quite a cheery affair, you should read the B-side, lol